Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构不完整。建议使用完整句子，避免语法错误，并且表达原因时更清晰。

例: No, I don't really like chocolate because it is too sweet for me. Also, eating too much chocolate can make me gain weight, so I try to avoid it.

提案: 回答不连贯，表达混乱，缺乏逻辑。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并使用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I don't eat chocolate very often. Sometimes, when I go shopping with my girlfriend and she wants chocolate, I might have some.

提案: 表达不清晰，语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议用简单句表达过去的习惯，并说明原因。

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate a lot when I was young. However, I stopped because it affected my health.

提案: 回答较为简单，表达不够流畅。建议使用更丰富的词汇和连词，使表达更自然和具体。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and sweet. Moreover, eating chocolate can make people feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答中断句不完整，表达不够流畅。建议用完整句子表达喜好，并说明原因。

例: I don't like chocolate very much, but if I have to choose, I prefer white chocolate because the combination of milk and chocolate tastes nice.

提案: 表达不连贯，语法错误较多。建议用完整句子表达观点，并使用条件句清晰说明情况。

例: It depends on the person. If they like chocolate, then it is a good gift. But if they don't like it, then chocolate is not a suitable present.

× No, I'm not really liking chocolate because I think chocolate is too sweet and it can.

✓ No, I don't really like chocolate because I think chocolate is too sweet and it can.

动词“like”在表达喜好时通常用一般现在时，不用进行时。这里应使用一般现在时态“don't really like”。

× and it can. Arise my weight so I didn't want to try it.

✓ and it can increase my weight so I don't want to try it.

“can”后应接动词原形，且时态应与上下文一致，表达现在的情况，故用“increase”而非“arise”，且“didn't want”应改为“don't want”。

× Uhm, it depends on. When I go to shop with my girlfriend and it is my girlfriend and then like it chocolate, I'm not like it it is.

✓ Uhm, it depends. When I go shopping with my girlfriend and she likes chocolate, I don't like it.

句子结构混乱，需调整为正确的表达方式，如“go shopping”，“she likes chocolate”，并且去掉多余重复部分。

× Yeah, along with young. I like each other, but my test is not good after I eating a lot of chocolate, so I prefer to pull this action after I grew up.

✓ Yeah, when I was young. I liked it, but my health was not good after I ate a lot of chocolate, so I preferred to stop this habit after I grew up.

时态使用错误，“like”应为过去式“liked”，“eating”应为过去式“ate”，“prefer”应为过去式“preferred”，并且表达更清晰。

× Maybe I think it is delicious for somebody and it is sweet and uh, uh in house it can also make some one feel happy.

✓ Maybe I think it is delicious for some people and it is sweet, and at home it can also make someone feel happy.

“somebody”应改为“some people”更符合语境，“in house”应为“at home”，“some one”应写为“someone”。

× Oh, because I don't like his chocolate. So I think this question is hard for me.

✓ Oh, because I don't like this chocolate. So I think this question is hard for me.

“his chocolate”用词错误，应为“this chocolate”指代当前话题的巧克力。

× Maybe I like white chocolate because. The milk mixture with the chocolate is tasty.

✓ Maybe I like white chocolate because the milk mixed with the chocolate is tasty.

句子断开不完整，应合并为一句完整句子，且“mixture”应改为“mixed”作为形容词使用。

× It depends on the situation if the. Person you want to send a gift is not like it's chocolate.

✓ It depends on the situation. If the person you want to send a gift to does not like chocolate,

句子断开且结构不完整，应调整为完整句子，并且“send a gift to”需要介词“to”。

× but if if the hill she lucky chocolate. I think this gave this is suitable.

✓ but if he or she likes chocolate, I think this gift is suitable.

“hill”应为“he or she”，“lucky”应为“likes”，“gave”应为“gift”，句子需调整为正确的代词和词汇。