Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite natural and detailed, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate, especially when I'm on vacation because I indulge in it at every meal. However, when I'm at home, I limit myself to once a week to maintain a healthy diet.

提案: Your answer is creative but the phrase 'two faces' is a bit unclear and the sentence structure is awkward. Try to use clearer expressions and link your ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week when I'm following a healthy diet, but when I'm on vacation, I indulge and eat it at almost every meal.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but watch your verb tenses and avoid repeating the same phrases. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas better.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid, but mostly during holidays like Halloween and Christmas because my family couldn't afford much. During these times, chocolate was given out generously at school and parties.

提案: Your answer has good points but could be more precise and better structured. Use linking words and avoid vague phrases like 'chemicals in it which makes 1 happy'.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains chemicals that can improve mood, acting like a natural antidepressant. Additionally, its delicious taste and strong marketing campaigns contribute to its popularity.

提案: Your answer is good but has some incomplete sentences and awkward phrasing. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use linking words to compare flavors.

例: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because it is the sweetest and has a smooth texture. However, I also enjoy dark and white chocolate, although white chocolate tastes quite different.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured but could be improved by using linking words and avoiding sentence fragments. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

例: Yes, giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea because it is convenient and there are many options to choose from. Moreover, recipients usually appreciate it since chocolate is delicious and can brighten their day.

× I love eating chocolate, it is one of my guilty pleasure.

✓ I love eating chocolate, it is one of my guilty pleasures.

The phrase 'one of my guilty pleasure' is incorrect because 'one of' requires a plural noun following it. 'Pleasure' should be pluralized to 'pleasures' to match the phrase structure.

× Especially when I'm on vacation, I'm eating chocolate breakfast, lunch and dinner.

✓ Especially when I'm on vacation, I eat chocolate for breakfast, lunch, and dinner.

The present continuous tense 'I'm eating' is not appropriate here because the sentence describes a habitual action during vacations. The simple present tense 'I eat' is more suitable for habitual actions.

× And I am a glutton for it.

✓ And I am a glutton for it.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× Until it becomes overwhelming.

✓ Until it becomes overwhelming.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb; however, it is used stylistically here and can be accepted in spoken language. No correction needed based on the provided grammar problem types.

× But when I'm not on vacation I eat about once a week because I want to maintain it.

✓ But when I'm not on vacation, I eat chocolate about once a week because I want to maintain it.

Adding a comma after the introductory clause improves clarity. Also, specifying 'eat chocolate' clarifies the object of 'eat'.

× I have two faces of eating chocolate.

✓ I have two phases of eating chocolate.

The word 'faces' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'phases' to indicate different periods or stages.

× In phase one, I am on a healthy moderate diet and I'm eating chocolate once a week.

✓ In phase one, I am on a healthy moderate diet and I eat chocolate once a week.

The present continuous 'I'm eating' is inappropriate for habitual actions; the simple present 'I eat' should be used.

× Face two I'm on vacation.

✓ Phase two, I'm on vacation.

The word 'Face' is incorrect; it should be 'Phase' to indicate a stage or period.

× And I indulge day in and day out, meal in an meal out.

✓ And I indulge day in and day out, meal in and meal out.

The phrase 'meal in an meal out' contains a typo; 'an' should be 'and'.

× Yes, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid, but only around holidays like Halloween, Christmas.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid, but only around holidays like Halloween and Christmas.

The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'Halloween, Christmas' should be connected with 'and'.

× This is because when I was a kid we could not afford a lot of chocolate.

✓ This is because when I was a kid, we could not afford a lot of chocolate.

A comma after the introductory clause improves sentence clarity.

× And so during holidays like Halloween and Christmas, these chocolate were given out in abundance in school and at parties.

✓ And so during holidays like Halloween and Christmas, this chocolate was given out in abundance in school and at parties.

'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular; therefore, 'these chocolate were' is incorrect. It should be 'this chocolate was'.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because it has chemicals in it which makes 1 happy.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it has chemicals in it which make you happy.

The verb 'makes' should agree with the plural noun 'chemicals', so it should be 'make'. Also, '1' is a typo and should be 'you'.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because it has chemicals in it which makes 1 happy.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it has chemicals in it which make you happy.

The pronoun '1' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'you' to refer generally to people.

× It seems to be antidepressant chemical.

✓ It seems to be an antidepressant chemical.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'an' before 'antidepressant chemical'.

× And also because it's very delicious and tasty and there is a big marketing campaign behind chocolate.

✓ Also, because it's very delicious and tasty, and there is a big marketing campaign behind chocolate.

Starting a sentence with 'And also' is redundant; 'Also' alone is sufficient. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate, although dark chocolate and white chocolate are not too far behind.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate, although dark chocolate and white chocolate are not far behind.

The phrase 'not too far behind' is informal; 'not far behind' is more appropriate in this context.

× I prefer milk chocolate because it is the sweetest and. An I like its texture.

✓ I prefer milk chocolate because it is the sweetest, and I like its texture.

The sentence is fragmented and contains a typo 'An'. It should be combined properly with a comma and corrected spelling.

× No one ever rejects chocolate.

✓ No one ever rejects chocolate.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.