Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적으로 부정확한 부분이 많습니다. 문장을 명확하게 구성하고, 이유를 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어서 말하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is sweet and delicious. It helps me relax and feel happy since eating sweets can relieve stress.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문장이 끊어져 있어 이해하기 어렵습니다. 빈도와 상황을 명확히 표현하고, 문장을 완성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a month. When I shop online, I often add chocolate to my cart because I like it.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 불완전합니다. 과거와 현재를 구분하여 명확하게 말하고, 이유를 간단히 덧붙이는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I liked it a lot. Even now, I still enjoy chocolate, so I always brush my teeth afterwards.

提案: 답변이 논리적이지 않고 문장이 끊어져 있습니다. 이유를 명확히 하고, 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious, which makes people feel happy and relaxed. For example, many people give chocolate as gifts on Valentine's Day.

提案: 답변이 이해하기 어렵고 문장이 단절되어 있습니다. 좋아하는 맛을 정확히 말하고, 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is dark chocolate because it has a rich taste and gives me energy.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 선물로서의 초콜릿의 장점을 명확히 말하고, 다양한 사람들에게 적합하다는 점을 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it tastes great and looks attractive. Both young and older people enjoy eating chocolate.

× So why not? Yes, I like eating chocolate is sweet and delicious.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is sweet and delicious.

The original sentence lacks proper sentence structure and conjunctions. 'So why not?' is unnecessary and confusing here. The sentence should connect the liking of chocolate with the reason using 'because'. 문장 구조가 올바르지 않고 접속사가 부족하여 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 'So why not?'은 불필요하며 혼란을 줍니다. 'because'를 사용해 이유를 명확히 연결해야 합니다.

× It makes me relax and happy. Because. Eating sweets makes people relieve the stress.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and happy because eating sweets helps people relieve stress.

The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper connection. 'Because' should not start a new sentence. Also, 'makes me relax' should be 'makes me feel relaxed' for correct expression. 문장이 단절되어 있고 연결이 부적절합니다. 'Because'는 문장 시작에 쓰면 안 되며, 'makes me relax'는 'makes me feel relaxed'로 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다.

× I eat chocolate once or twice for a month when I. Get online shopping on I choose chocolate. In my cart. It is good.

✓ I eat chocolate once or twice a month when I go online shopping and choose chocolate in my cart. It is good.

Incorrect preposition 'for a month' should be 'a month'. The sentence is fragmented and lacks proper verb forms. 'Get online shopping on' is incorrect; it should be 'go online shopping'. 전치사 'for a month'는 'a month'로 수정해야 하며, 문장이 단절되고 동사 형태가 부적절합니다. 'Get online shopping on'은 'go online shopping'으로 고쳐야 합니다.

× Yes, I I was a kid. I like to eat eating chocolate, so I had a lot of. That truth? Oh. Until now, I like chocolate and so I brush my teeth after.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I liked to eat chocolate, so I ate a lot of it. Until now, I like chocolate, so I brush my teeth afterward.

Tense inconsistency: 'I like' should be past tense 'I liked' when referring to childhood. 'Eat eating' is incorrect; use 'eat'. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; it needs restructuring. 과거 시제 일관성 부족: 어린 시절을 말할 때 'I like'는 'I liked'로 해야 합니다. 'Eat eating'은 잘못된 표현이며, 문장이 단절되어 있어 재구성이 필요합니다.

× Chocolate is very sweet and delicious an in makes people leave the leave the stress and feel happy. Up. For in Valentine days or many people keep. All. To give.

✓ Chocolate is very sweet and delicious and it helps people relieve stress and feel happy. On Valentine's Day, many people give chocolate as gifts.

Incorrect prepositions and fragmented sentences. 'Leave the stress' should be 'relieve stress'. 'For in Valentine days' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'On Valentine's Day'. 부적절한 전치사 사용과 문장 단절이 있습니다. 'Leave the stress'는 'relieve stress'로 수정해야 하며, 'For in Valentine days'는 'On Valentine's Day'로 고쳐야 합니다.

× I like. Doctor quit it. Is. Very deep pan. Tasty. It makes me energetic an. It is good too.

✓ I like dark chocolate. It is very deep in flavor and tasty. It makes me energetic and it is good too.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect words ('Doctor quit it', 'deep pan'). It should be 'dark chocolate' and 'deep in flavor'. Also, sentence fragments need to be combined properly. 원문에 불명확하고 잘못된 단어들이 포함되어 있습니다('Doctor quit it', 'deep pan'). 'dark chocolate'과 'deep in flavor'로 수정해야 하며, 문장 단편들을 적절히 연결해야 합니다.

× Yes, chocolate is tasty and. It is, it looks good, so it is Chocolate is good gift for everyone. Uh. Older people were Young people like to eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, chocolate is tasty and looks good, so it is a good gift for everyone. Both older and young people like to eat chocolate.

Sentence fragments and repetition ('it is Chocolate is good gift') cause confusion. 'Chocolate is good gift' needs an article 'a'. Also, 'were' is incorrect; should be 'and'. 문장 단편과 반복('it is Chocolate is good gift')으로 혼란을 줍니다. 'Chocolate is good gift'에는 관사 'a'가 필요하며, 'were'는 'and'로 수정해야 합니다.