Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc, có nhiều phần không hiểu được. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp lại và sử dụng từ ngữ phù hợp, dễ hiểu.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it has a rich and sweet taste that makes me feel happy.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không tập trung vào câu hỏi và có nhiều phần không liên quan hoặc không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp lại và thêm chi tiết cụ thể có liên quan.

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week because I enjoy it as a treat after work.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về thói quen khi còn nhỏ.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was a sweet snack that I really enjoyed.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng nhưng thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, liên kết ý rõ ràng và giải thích cụ thể lý do tại sao chocolate phổ biến.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can be enjoyed by people of all ages. Also, some types of chocolate have health benefits.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời câu hỏi nhưng câu trả lời còn lủng củng và thiếu sự mạch lạc. Bạn nên nói rõ ràng về hương vị yêu thích và lý do thích nó, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate with 80% cacao because it has a rich taste and is not too sweet.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều phần không hiểu được. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, giải thích lý do tại sao chocolate là món quà tốt, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like it and it can make them happy.

× Defending the Black took place like the Doctor Blade.

✓ Defending the Black took place like the Doctor Blade.

This sentence is unclear and seems to misuse the verb form 'Defending'. However, since it does not match any specific grammar problem type from the list, no correction is made.

× Taste like a beat a beat beater but.

✓ It tastes like a beat, a beat beater, but.

The sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. Adding 'It' as the subject and 'tastes' as the verb corrects the sentence structure and preposition usage.

× But I like the taste.

✓ But I like the taste.

The sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Like I eat chocolate one times a week.

✓ I eat chocolate once a week.

The phrase 'one times' is incorrect; 'once' is the correct singular adverb for frequency.

× I read the information online that each place is very good for people.

✓ I read information online that each place is very good for people.

The article 'the' before 'information' is unnecessary here; 'information' is uncountable and does not need 'the' in this context.

× Good for people has so.

✓ It is good for people.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb; restructuring it to 'It is good for people' corrects the sentence.

× I love eating squid and I eat it every week.

✓ I love eating chocolate and I eat it every week.

The student likely meant 'chocolate' instead of 'squid' based on context; correcting the pronoun to match the subject improves clarity.

× I think every kid like to play definitely white or sweet to clean becauses.

✓ I think every kid likes to play definitely with white or sweet to clean because.

The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with the singular subject 'every kid'. The sentence remains unclear but verb agreement is corrected.

× Is like a snack for kids in it is very nice.

✓ It is like a snack for kids and it is very nice.

The sentence lacks a subject and proper conjunction; adding 'It' and 'and' corrects the structure and preposition use.

× It did this is a bit sweet and bitter butter.

✓ It is a bit sweet and bitter butter.

The phrase 'It did this' is incorrect; removing it and using present tense 'is' fits the context better.

× But everything mixed together it make the.

✓ But everything mixed together makes the perfect taste.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'everything mixed together'. The sentence is completed for clarity.

× So chocolate start in Belgium anyway, Famous in there.

✓ So chocolate started in Belgium anyway, famous there.

The verb 'start' should be in past tense 'started' to match the past event described.

× And then is separate to all over the world because of it as an.

✓ And then it spread all over the world because of it as an ingredient.

The phrase 'is separate to' is incorrect; 'spread all over' is the correct expression. The sentence is completed for clarity.

× I like to play also bring benefit in people health so.

✓ I like to say it also brings benefits to people's health, so.

The sentence is unclear; correcting pronouns and verb forms improves clarity and grammar.

× So they like to eat the chocolate.

✓ So they like to eat chocolate.

The definite article 'the' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary here; removing it is more natural.

× Like from every age.

✓ People of every age like it.

The phrase is incomplete and awkward; rephrasing improves clarity and grammar.

× As I already recommended, I like Doctor Lee.

✓ As I already mentioned, I like Doctor Lee.

The verb 'recommended' is incorrect in this context; 'mentioned' is more appropriate.

× More detail We've 80% dark chocolate cacao.

✓ More details: we have 80% dark chocolate cacao.

The phrase is incomplete and lacks proper prepositions and articles; correcting improves clarity.

× So it is very nice for me.

✓ So it is very nice to me.

The phrase 'nice for me' is less common; 'nice to me' is more natural in this context.

× I like it. Like it a bit better?

✓ I like it. I like it a bit better.

The second sentence is a question but should be a statement; correcting the structure improves grammar.

× Not many sweet.

✓ Not very sweet.

The phrase 'Not many sweet' is incorrect; 'Not very sweet' is the correct adverbial phrase.

× But I like it.

✓ But I like it.

The sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Just definitely.

✓ Definitely, yes.

The phrase 'Just definitely' is incomplete; rephrasing to 'Definitely, yes' is clearer.

× Using chocolate asagi here.

✓ Using chocolate as a gift here.

The word 'asagi' is likely a mispronunciation or typo; correcting to 'as a gift' fits the context.

× Good idea to keep people.

✓ It's a good idea to please people.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear; rephrasing improves clarity and grammar.

× Gift because like even bring squid to found the chocolate to people in the game for a few it it also brings the benefit for their health.

✓ Gifts like chocolate not only please people but also bring health benefits.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical; rephrasing clarifies meaning and corrects conjunction use.

× So I think it's very good. To give chocolate.

✓ So I think it's very good to give chocolate.

The sentence is split incorrectly; combining into one sentence improves grammar.