Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子结构不完整，表达不够自然，且有语法错误。建议使用完整句子，避免重复和不连贯的表达。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and is very satisfying. Moreover, I enjoy having it as a treat after a long day. There are also many types of chocolate, such as milk and dark, which makes it interesting to try different flavors.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，准确表达频率和原因。

例: I usually eat chocolate about once a week. Although I really like chocolate, I try to control my intake to maintain my body shape.

提案: 回答较好，但可以更简洁自然，避免重复。建议适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid because it tastes rich and satisfying. In fact, my grandma always bought me a box of chocolate for my birthday since she knew it was my favorite gift.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点并使用连接词。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes good and comes in different types like milk, white, and dark chocolate, which satisfy different people's tastes. Also, it has become a trendy gift to express gratitude or love to others.

提案: 回答中词汇使用错误严重，表达不清晰。建议使用正确词汇，简洁表达喜好和原因。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it has a perfect balance of sweetness and creaminess. I find dark chocolate too bitter for my taste.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和表达不够自然。建议使用更准确的词汇和流畅的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, definitely. I think chocolate is a good way to express gratitude or love to family and friends. It can make people feel happy and appreciated.

× Eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and is very satisfying.

✓ I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and is very satisfying.

句子缺少主语，导致结构不完整。应添加主语“I”使句子完整。

× Also, I'm a big fan of these words, so chocolate is a great way for me to have a treat after a long day.

✓ Also, I'm a big fan of sweets, so chocolate is a great way for me to have a treat after a long day.

“these words”用法不当，应使用“sweets”表示甜食。

× Additionally, there are many different types of chocolates we can choose from like milk, dark and.

✓ Additionally, there are many different types of chocolate we can choose from, like milk and dark.

句子末尾不完整，缺少并列成分，且“chocolates”应为不可数名词“chocolate”。

× Well I ate chocolate about once awake.

✓ Well, I eat chocolate about once a week.

“ate”是过去式，句意应为现在习惯，故用一般现在时“eat”；“awake”拼写错误，应为“a week”。

× Although I really king on 18 chocolates I still want to keep my body shape so I can't have it every day and I need to control 8.

✓ Although I really like chocolates, I still want to keep my body shape, so I can't have them every day and need to control my intake.

“king on 18 chocolates”表达错误，应为“like chocolates”；数字“18”和“8”无意义，应改为泛指；“it”指代不明，应改为“them”。

× Well, definitely yes.

✓ Well, definitely yes, I did.

回答过去习惯时，需用过去时态，补充动词“did”使句子完整。

× I believe that no child can resist such delicious chocolate.

✓ I believe that no child can resist such delicious chocolate.

此句无明显语法错误，无需修改。

× It tastes rich and satisfying and I remember that every birthday my grandma bought a box of chocolate because she knew it was my favorite gift and she always told everyone proudly that chocolate made me very happy.

✓ It tastes rich and satisfying, and I remember that every birthday my grandma bought a box of chocolate because she knew it was my favorite gift. She always told everyone proudly that chocolate made me very happy.

句子过长，缺少适当的标点符号，导致结构混乱，应拆分为两个句子。

× Well for this question because it tastes good and has different types of like milk, white and dark and so on which can satisfy different peoples flavor.

✓ Well, for this question, it's because it tastes good and has different types like milk, white, and dark, which can satisfy different people's flavors.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，且“peoples flavor”应为“people's flavors”。

× Also to blurts has become a trendy gift.

✓ Also, chocolates have become a trendy gift.

“to blurts”拼写错误，应为“chocolates”；动词应与复数主语一致，使用“have”。

× For people to express their gratitude to their lovers.

✓ People use chocolate to express their gratitude to their loved ones.

句子不完整，缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整表达。

× Wow, that must be milk chocolate because it has a perfect balance of swingers and criminals.

✓ Wow, that must be milk chocolate because it has a perfect balance of sweetness and creaminess.

“swingers and criminals”词义错误，应为“sweetness and creaminess”。

× I find a dark chocolate too bitter for my taste, so I preferred the sweater and this monster taste of. Milk chocolate.

✓ I find dark chocolate too bitter for my taste, so I prefer the sweeter and smoother taste of milk chocolate.

“a dark chocolate”应为“dark chocolate”；“preferred”时态错误，应为现在时“prefer”；“sweater and this monster taste”拼写和用词错误，应为“sweeter and smoother taste”。

× Yes, definitely. Uhm. I think that chocolate is kind of caved to express people's gratitude or love to their families or friends.

✓ Yes, definitely. Uhm. I think that chocolate is kind of used to express people's gratitude or love to their families or friends.

“caved”拼写错误，应为“used”。

× It's a great way to make others feel happy.

✓ It's a great way to make others feel happy.

此句无明显语法错误，无需修改。