Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est un peu confuse et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez de formuler des phrases complètes et claires, en évitant les phrases inachevées. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et naturelle.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and energetic. For example, when I eat chocolate, I feel more motivated and I enjoy sharing it with my friends.

提案: Votre réponse est claire mais un peu répétitive. Essayez d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées et évitez de répéter les mêmes expressions. Soyez précis sur la fréquence et les raisons.

例: I usually eat chocolate once a day because I really enjoy it. After a long and tiring day, I like to have a piece to relax and share some with my friends.

提案: Votre réponse est bonne mais contient quelques erreurs grammaticales. Faites attention à la structure des phrases et utilisez des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

例: When I was a kid, I used to eat a lot of chocolate, especially white and milk chocolate, because I loved its aroma and creamy taste. Even now, I still enjoy chocolate, but not as often as before.

提案: Votre réponse est difficile à comprendre à cause des erreurs et des mots incorrects. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec des phrases complètes et utilisez un vocabulaire approprié.

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste and pleasant aroma. Both children and adults enjoy it since it brings them happiness and comfort.

提案: Votre réponse manque de fluidité et contient des phrases incomplètes. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour exprimer clairement vos idées.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is milk chocolate because it reminds me of my birthday celebrations. I also enjoy its wonderful taste and aroma, which always make me happy.

提案: Votre réponse est compréhensible mais contient des erreurs grammaticales et des phrases incomplètes. Essayez de formuler des phrases complètes et utilisez des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a very pleasant gift because most people like its taste. Therefore, it can make them happy and bring joy to their lives. In my opinion, it is a wonderful present for a friend.

× Yes I do, I really like eating chocolate becauses it gives me a lot of positive emotions.

✓ Yes I do, I really like eating chocolate because it gives me a lot of positive emotions.

The word 'becauses' is a misspelling of the conjunction 'because'. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity and correctness.

× When eating the chocolate, I usually felt. Better and more. Ambitious I like to share these feelings with my friends and gives them a P.

✓ When eating chocolate, I usually feel better and more ambitious. I like to share these feelings with my friends and give them a positive feeling.

The verb 'felt' is past tense but the sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'feel' is correct. Also, 'gives' should be 'give' to agree with the subject 'I'. The sentence was fragmented and unclear, so it was restructured for clarity.

× To be honest, I always eat chocolate. Once a day because I really like it.

✓ To be honest, I eat chocolate once a day because I really like it.

The phrase 'always eat chocolate. Once a day' is awkward and incorrectly punctuated. Combining into one sentence with correct word order improves clarity.

× I also share this piece of chocolate with my friends and after a long tiring day, I always like to grab a piece and to get positive emotions.

✓ I also share this piece of chocolate with my friends, and after a long tiring day, I always like to grab a piece to get positive emotions.

The phrase 'and to get positive emotions' is incorrect; 'to get' should not be preceded by 'and' here. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' to separate clauses.

× I used to eat chocolate a lot, especially white and milk chocolate becaused I love. Its aroma and it's creamy taste.

✓ I used to eat chocolate a lot, especially white and milk chocolate because I love its aroma and its creamy taste.

'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. Also, the sentence was fragmented; 'I love its aroma and its creamy taste' should be one continuous sentence.

× Even now I still enjoy eating chocolate, although not so often as I did when I was younger.

✓ Even now, I still enjoy eating chocolate, although not as often as I did when I was younger.

The phrase 'not so often as' is less common; 'not as often as' is the correct comparative structure here.

× In my opinion chocolate. It is a very popular kenzie in over the Walt becauses of its taste and how it smells.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate is very popular all over the world because of its taste and aroma.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains misspellings ('kenzie', 'Walt', 'becauses'). It was corrected for grammar, spelling, and clarity.

× All kids love it and older people to be 'cause it gives them positive emotions and help.

✓ All kids love it, and older people do too because it gives them positive emotions and helps.

The phrase 'older people to be' is incorrect; 'older people do too' is correct. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk be 'cause it associated me with the. My birthday celebrations and it makes me happy also I like it's wonderful taste and. Aroma.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk because it is associated with my birthday celebrations and it makes me happy. Also, I like its wonderful taste and aroma.

The sentence was fragmented and contained incorrect contractions ('be 'cause'). 'Associated me with' should be 'is associated with'. 'It's' (it is) was incorrectly used instead of 'its' (possessive).

× Yes, I think it is very pleasant present 'cause most of the people like the taste of the chocolate.

✓ Yes, I think it is a very pleasant present because most people like the taste of chocolate.

'Cause' is informal; 'because' is preferred in formal speech. Also, 'very pleasant present' needs the article 'a'. 'Most of the people' is better as 'most people'.

× That's why it can make them happy and bringing joy for their life.

✓ That's why it can make them happy and bring joy to their lives.

After 'can', the base form of the verb should be used ('bring' not 'bringing'). Also, 'for their life' should be 'to their lives' for correct preposition and plural form.

× So I in my opinion, it is a very. Wonderful present for your friend.

✓ So, in my opinion, it is a very wonderful present for your friend.

The sentence was fragmented and had incorrect word order. It was corrected for proper sentence flow and punctuation.