Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'like' and be more precise. Also, explain your preference with a clear reason to make your answer more effective and natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth, and I prefer it over traditional Indian sweets due to its rich and creamy taste.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and be more specific about why you like chocolate's texture and smell.

例: I eat chocolate almost every day because I love its smooth texture and delightful aroma; in fact, I even enjoy chocolate-scented perfumes.

提案: Work on grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about how chocolate helped you during exams.

例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate as a child, which unfortunately caused cavities. Moreover, I often ate chocolate while studying for exams because it helped me relieve stress.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words and provide clear reasons why chocolate is popular globally.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it helps people relieve stress and satisfies their sweet cravings.

提案: Correct grammar mistakes and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Be specific about why Belgian chocolate is your favourite and how it helps you.

例: My favourite flavour is Belgian chocolate because it is sweet, creamy, and delicious. I usually eat it during my periods as it helps me overcome cramps.

提案: Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear opinion with reasons and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a good idea because it symbolizes sweetness and shows you care about the recipient.

× Yeah, I like eating chocolates.

✓ Yeah, I like eating chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance or food in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, but here the general preference is meant, so 'chocolate' is correct.

× Like I crave for sweet things and I prefer chocolates more than the sweets, regular Indian sweets.

✓ Like I crave sweet things and I prefer chocolate more than sweets, regular Indian sweets.

The verb 'crave' does not require the preposition 'for' after it. Also, 'chocolate' should be uncountable here as a general preference, and 'sweets' is plural but 'the sweets' is unnecessary unless specifying particular sweets.

× I often eat chocolates like every day.

✓ I often eat chocolate, like every day.

Again, 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun is preferred when talking about eating it generally. 'Chocolates' refers to individual pieces or types.

× I eat chocolate because of their their texture though their smell.

✓ I eat chocolate because of its texture and its smell.

The pronoun 'their' is plural, but 'chocolate' is singular and uncountable, so 'its' should be used. Also, 'though' is incorrect here; 'and' fits better to connect texture and smell.

× I'm very obsessed with their smells of chocolates like I use perfumes of chocolates too.

✓ I'm very obsessed with the smell of chocolate; I even use chocolate-scented perfumes.

'Their smells of chocolates' is incorrect; 'the smell of chocolate' is correct. Also, 'perfumes of chocolates' is awkward; 'chocolate-scented perfumes' is clearer.

× Yeah, I usually used to eat chocolates a lot and that cause me cavity 2 and.

✓ Yeah, I usually used to eat chocolates a lot and that caused me cavities.

The verb 'cause' should be in past tense 'caused' to match 'used to eat'. Also, 'cavity 2 and' is unclear; 'cavities' is the correct plural noun.

× I was very fond of chocolate while going to poaching for preparing for my exams, I used to eat chocolates.

✓ I was very fond of chocolate; while preparing for my exams, I used to eat chocolates.

The phrase 'going to poaching' is unclear and likely incorrect. The sentence is better structured by separating ideas and clarifying the context.

× They help me manage my stress levels.

✓ They helped me manage my stress levels.

Since the context is past ('used to eat'), the verb should be in past tense 'helped'.

× Chocolate is popular around the world the 'cause it help people to relieve their stress and other than that for their cravings that the grave.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because it helps people relieve their stress and satisfy their cravings.

'Cause' should be 'because' for clarity. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular 'chocolate'. 'That the grave' is unclear and likely a mishearing; 'satisfy their cravings' fits better.

× Chocolate is popular around the world the 'cause it help people to relieve their stress and other than that for their cravings that the grave.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because it helps people relieve their stress and satisfy their cravings.

The verb 'help' must be in third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'chocolate'.

× My favorite flavor in chocolate is Belgian chocolate because it's sweet, it's creamy, and it's delicious.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is Belgian chocolate because it's sweet, creamy, and delicious.

The phrase 'flavor in chocolate' should be 'flavor of chocolate'. Also, listing adjectives can omit repeated 'it's' for smoother flow.

× Are usually eat Belgian chocolates during my periods becauses they helped me to get over my crams.

✓ I usually eat Belgian chocolates during my periods because they help me get over my cramps.

'Are usually eat' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually eat'. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'Helped me to get over' should be present tense 'help me get over' to indicate habitual action. 'Crams' should be 'cramps'.

× Yeah, that's a good option to give to chocolate to someone becaused.

✓ Yeah, that's a good option to give chocolate to someone because.

'Becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'to give to chocolate' is incorrect; 'give chocolate to someone' is correct.

× That's a sign that, yeah. You are gifting someone something that is sweet enough.

✓ That's a sign that you are gifting someone something sweet enough.

The sentence is fragmented; combining into one sentence improves clarity and flow.