Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议简洁明了地表达喜欢巧克力的原因，并注意语法和拼写。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议使用正确时态和句式，清晰表达频率和原因。

例: I used to eat chocolate very often when I was a child, but now I eat it seldom because I am afraid of gaining weight.

提案: 回答中有语法和拼写错误，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地说明过去经常吃巧克力的原因。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I was not aware of the effects of fat.

提案: 回答表达不够准确，语法和用词有误。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，说明巧克力受欢迎的原因。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a sweet taste that many people enjoy.

提案: 回答不连贯，表达不清晰。建议明确表达自己喜欢的巧克力口味并给出理由。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is sweet and creamy, unlike dark chocolate which is bitter.

提案: 回答语法错误多，表达混乱。建议清晰表达观点并使用连贯的句子。

例: I think chocolate can be a good gift because many people like it, but it depends on personal preference.

× Yes, I like 18 Shockley very much because.

✓ Yes, I like 18 Shockley very much.

句子中“because”后面没有内容，导致句子结构不完整。应去掉“because”或补充完整的原因。

× It's so sweet and the I think it can bring me some hapiness.

✓ It's so sweet and I think it can bring me some happiness.

“the”在这里使用错误，且“hapiness”拼写错误，应为“happiness”。

× When I was child I ate chocolate very often but now I'm so scared to be fat so will I ate chocolate? Seldom.

✓ When I was a child, I ate chocolate very often, but now I'm so scared of getting fat, so I seldom eat chocolate.

缺少冠词“a”在“a child”中；“will I ate chocolate?”结构错误，应改为“I seldom eat chocolate.”；“scared to be fat”表达不自然，应为“scared of getting fat”。

× Yes, I often ate chocolate Y ward kid because when I was a kid I have no aware of fat.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I was not aware of fat.

“Y ward kid”应为“when I was a kid”；“have no aware”语法错误，应为“was not aware”。

× Because chocolate is sweet flavor.

✓ Because chocolate has a sweet flavor.

“sweet”是形容词，需用名词“flavor”前加冠词“a”，且动词应为“has”。

× Although it varies from person to person, I think most of people like a favor.

✓ Although it varies from person to person, I think most people like a flavor.

“most of people”应为“most people”；“favor”拼写错误，应为“flavor”。

× I like milk chocolate very much because.

✓ I like milk chocolate very much.

句子中“because”后无内容，导致句子不完整，应去掉“because”。

× Most of people like dark chocolate, but icing is too terrible.

✓ Most people like dark chocolate, but I think it is too terrible.

“icing”用词错误，应为“I think it”；“most of people”应为“most people”。

× Will icing it depends on personal preference because somebody like Chcolate but somebody saying it will make them be fight.

✓ Well, I think it depends on personal preference because some people like chocolate but some say it will make them fight.

“Will icing it”表达错误，应为“Well, I think it”；“somebody like”应为“some people like”；“somebody saying”应为“some say”；“make them be fight”表达错误，应为“make them fight”。