Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relax when I feel stressed or tired.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Provide a clear and concise response without repeating the same information. Use simple linking words if needed.

例: I usually eat chocolate twice a week, especially during weekends.

提案: There are grammatical mistakes and unclear vocabulary ('tank'). Make sure to use correct grammar and appropriate words. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

例: When I was a kid, I used to eat chocolates a lot because they were my favourite treat.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more specific and coherent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more detailed reasons.

例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste and the fact that many people enjoy sweet treats.

提案: Good content but grammar and sentence structure need improvement. Use linking words and correct grammar to make your answer clearer and more natural.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is healthy and gives me energy.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Avoid filler words and ensure your response is complete and coherent. Use linking words to explain your opinion.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because most people enjoy it and it is suitable for many occasions.

× I like to eat chocolates becaused it relax my mind or when I am buoyed it helps me to relax my mind.

✓ I like to eat chocolates because it relaxes my mind or when I am buoyed, it helps me to relax my mind.

The verb 'relax' should be in the third person singular form 'relaxes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'.

× I eat chocolate twice a week or sometimes it maybe twice a week.

✓ I eat chocolate twice a week or sometimes it may be twice a week.

The modal verb 'may' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'be', not 'maybe' which is an adverb meaning 'perhaps'.

× I remember when I was a kid I used to eat chocolates a lot. Becauses it was my favorite tank.

✓ I remember when I was a kid I used to eat chocolates a lot because it was my favorite snack.

'Becauses' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because'. Also, 'tank' is a wrong word here; the correct word is 'snack'.

× I believe that chocolate is popular around the world because of its taste or the preferences of people.

✓ I believe that chocolate is popular around the world because of its taste and the preferences of people.

Using 'or' suggests an exclusive choice, but here both reasons are true together, so 'and' is more appropriate.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I feel like that it also is very beneficial for a health and also it gives me some type of energy.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I feel that it is also very beneficial for health and it gives me some type of energy.

'Feel like that' is incorrect; 'feel that' is correct. 'A health' is incorrect; 'health' is uncountable and does not need an article. Also, 'also' is better placed before 'is'.

× Yes, I think it's a good gift to give to others be 'cause I feel like that. Papa.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good gift to give to others because I feel that way.

'Be 'cause' is informal and incorrectly split; it should be 'because'. 'I feel like that. Papa.' is unclear and incomplete; it should be 'I feel that way.'