Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is too short and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and explain your reason with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid filler words like 'Be 'cause'.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Please give a direct answer about frequency and use proper sentence structure.

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week, not every day.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many grammar mistakes. Use past tense correctly and explain clearly why your habits changed.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a child, but now I eat it less because I want to stay healthy.

提案: Your answer lacks coherence and contains grammar errors. Use linking words and explain your ideas clearly.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and helps people feel relaxed when they eat it.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Clearly state your favourite flavour and give reasons using correct vocabulary.

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it tastes sweet, although dark chocolate is healthier.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammar mistakes. Give a clear opinion and explain why chocolate is a good gift.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like it and it is easy to share.

× I really love to eat chocolate. Be 'cause. It's testy. That's why I love to eat.

✓ I really love eating chocolate because it's tasty. That's why I love to eat it.

The phrase 'love to eat' is grammatically correct but 'love eating' is more natural in this context. Also, 'Be 'cause' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. 'Testy' is a misspelling of 'tasty'. Adding 'it' at the end clarifies the object of 'love to eat'.

× Of course, nothing everyday. But once or two times. For a week.

✓ Of course, not every day. But once or twice a week.

'Nothing everyday' is incorrect; it should be 'not every day'. 'Once or two times' should be 'once or twice'. 'For a week' should be 'a week' to indicate frequency.

× Yes. I often eat the chocolate when I was a kid. But now the reason why I don't eat every month, every day. Is a. When I was a child, I did a lot. That's why I I think so.

✓ Yes. I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. But now, the reason why I don't eat it every day or every month is because when I was a child, I ate a lot. That's why I think so.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'The chocolate' is unnecessary; 'chocolate' is sufficient. The sentence structure is fragmented and needs to be combined for clarity. 'Did a lot' is vague; 'ate a lot' is clearer.

× I often eat the chocolate when I was a kid.

✓ I often ate chocolate when I was a kid.

The definite article 'the' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary here. Also, the verb tense should be past tense 'ate' to match the time frame 'when I was a kid'.

× But now the reason why I don't eat every month, every day.

✓ But now, the reason why I don't eat it every day or every month.

The pronoun 'it' is needed to refer back to 'chocolate'. Also, the phrase 'every month, every day' is awkward; 'every day or every month' is clearer.

× When someone needs the chocolate it's feels like relax it.

✓ When someone needs chocolate, it feels relaxing.

'The chocolate' is unnecessary; 'chocolate' is general. 'It's feels' is incorrect; should be 'it feels'. 'Like relax it' is incorrect; 'feels relaxing' is correct.

× That's why everyone eating chocolate. Chocolate.

✓ That's why everyone eats chocolate.

The verb 'eating' should be in present simple 'eats' to match 'everyone'. The repeated 'Chocolate.' is unnecessary.

× I love to eat the medium one. On the dark chocolate is not, it's a. I think the dark chocolate is good for health ihurt. But not.

✓ I love to eat the medium one. The dark chocolate is not. I think dark chocolate is good for health, but not for me.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'On the dark chocolate is not, it's a.' is incorrect and unclear. 'Ihurt' seems to be a typo or mispronunciation. The correction clarifies the meaning.

× Yeah, I think it's a good idea to give it. As a gift. 'Cause. The most of the country has owned the chocolate so.

✓ Yeah, I think it's a good idea to give it as a gift because most countries have chocolate.

The sentence is fragmented. 'The most of the country has owned the chocolate so' is incorrect; it should be 'most countries have chocolate'. 'Cause' should be 'because' for formality.