Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Try to start with a direct response, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and grammatical errors.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. Moreover, I enjoy trying different kinds of chocolates, which makes me feel happy and satisfied.

提案: Try to give a clear frequency and explain your reason using linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and improve grammar for better clarity.

例: I usually eat chocolate occasionally, about once every two or three days. I believe that eating it less often makes it taste better and more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer should be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: No, I did not eat chocolate often as a child because my parents were concerned about my teeth. However, I occasionally enjoyed chocolates on special occasions.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and complete sentences. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy it as a snack. Additionally, it is commonly given as a gift during special occasions like birthdays and festivals.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and explain your reasons clearly. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'moreover' correctly to connect ideas.

例: My favourite chocolate flavour is the one with nuts, such as dry fruits, raisins, almonds, and cashews. For example, these ingredients enhance the taste and add a crunchy texture, making the chocolate more enjoyable.

提案: Make your answer more fluent by completing sentences and using linking words. Clarify your opinion with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like sweets. However, it depends on the recipient's personal preference whether they enjoy chocolate or not.

× I love to eat chocolate becauses I love that month of eating it and as I will post man who loves sweets so I love different kinds of chocolate and I do try many chocolates.

✓ I love to eat chocolate because I love that moment of eating it, and as I am a person who loves sweets, I love different kinds of chocolate and I do try many chocolates.

The sentence uses 'becauses' which is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, the conjunctions are not used properly, causing confusion. 'And as I will post man who loves sweets so' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'and as I am a person who loves sweets'. Proper conjunctions and sentence structure improve clarity.

× It soo this me and I feel like.

✓ It soothes me and I feel like it.

The phrase 'It soo this me' is incorrect. The correct verb form is 'soothes' (third person singular present tense). Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'it' clarifies the meaning.

× Eating chocolate make me feel good.

✓ Eating chocolate makes me feel good.

The subject 'Eating chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make' to agree in number.

× I do not love to eat chocolates daily be 'cause I love to eat occasionally.

✓ I do not like to eat chocolates daily because I prefer to eat them occasionally.

The phrase 'love to eat chocolates daily' is awkward; 'like' fits better here. Also, 'be 'cause' is a colloquial contraction and should be 'because'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× And I feel like it in chocolate on rare days or after 2-3 days.

✓ And I feel like eating chocolate on rare days or after 2-3 days.

The phrase 'feel like it in chocolate' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'feel like eating chocolate'. Also, 'on rare days' is acceptable, but the sentence is clearer with this correction.

× No, I didn't eat chocolate when I was a kid because my parents did not preferred me eating chocolates when I was a kid becaused my teeth were not that stronger at that times and.

✓ No, I didn't eat chocolate when I was a kid because my parents did not prefer me eating chocolates when I was a kid because my teeth were not that strong at that time.

The verb 'did not preferred' is incorrect; after 'did not' the base form 'prefer' should be used. 'Becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. 'Stronger' should be 'strong' as it is a positive adjective here. 'At that times' should be 'at that time'.

× They did not prefer me to eat sweets. Day on daily basis, but occasionally I like to eat chocolates.

✓ They did not prefer me to eat sweets daily, but occasionally I like to eat chocolates.

'Day on daily basis' is incorrect and redundant. The correct phrase is 'daily'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Absolutely. I think chocolate is much popular around the world because most people often eat it as a snack and they. And they preferred to give others as a gift on the special occasions such as birthday parties, festivals. Acceptable.

✓ Absolutely. I think chocolate is very popular around the world because most people often eat it as a snack and they prefer to give it to others as a gift on special occasions such as birthday parties and festivals.

'Much popular' should be 'very popular'. The sentence 'and they.' is incomplete and should be connected properly. 'Preferred' should be 'prefer' to match present tense. 'Give others as a gift' is incorrect; it should be 'give it to others as a gift'. 'Acceptable' is out of place and removed.

× There are different varieties of flavors, but my most favorite 1 is in which the nuts are present, such as dry fruits, raisins, almonds, and cashews.

✓ There are different varieties of flavors, but my most favorite one is the one which contains nuts, such as dry fruits, raisins, almonds, and cashews.

'Most favorite 1' is incorrect; 'most favorite one' is correct. 'In which the nuts are present' is awkward; 'which contains nuts' is better.

× They increase the flavor of the chocolate an moreover it increases the calories and it provides.

✓ They increase the flavor of the chocolate; moreover, they increase the calories and provide energy.

'An moreover' is incorrect; it should be 'and moreover' or better 'moreover'. The sentence is incomplete; 'it provides' needs an object, so 'provide energy' is added for clarity.

× Yes, I think a chocolate must be given as a gift others, but it depends on the.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate must be given as a gift to others, but it depends on the person's preference.

'A chocolate' is incorrect when referring to chocolate in general; 'chocolate' without article is correct. 'As a gift others' should be 'as a gift to others'. The sentence is incomplete; 'depends on the' is completed with 'person's preference' for clarity.