Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows your liking for chocolate, but it is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to give a clear and natural reason using simple sentences. Avoid informal contractions like "be 'cause" and unclear phrases like "in my love or situation."

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and relaxed, especially when I am feeling stressed.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant information. Focus on answering the question directly and clearly. Avoid unrelated details like your employment status unless it relates to the question. Use linking words if you add extra information.

例: I eat chocolate quite often, usually a few times a week, because I enjoy its sweet taste.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains inappropriate or confusing details. Answer the question directly and provide specific supporting details. Avoid unrelated or negative statements that do not fit the context.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was my favourite treat after school.

提案: Your answer is very unclear and lacks coherence. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words. Give clear reasons why chocolate is popular, such as its taste or cultural significance.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its sweet taste, and it is often given as gifts during celebrations.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Clearly state your favourite flavour and explain why. Avoid vague phrases like "Every everything" and unclear words like "miss chocolate."

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is creamy and sweet, but I also enjoy dark chocolate sometimes.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift if the person likes it because it can make them happy and show that you care.

× Yes, I do like eating chocolate be 'cause when I'm in my love or situation I find myself joy when I'm eating chocolate.

✓ Yes, I do like eating chocolate because when I'm in love or in a situation, I find joy when I'm eating chocolate.

The phrase 'be 'cause' is an incorrect conjunction usage. It should be 'because' to properly connect the clauses. Also, 'in my love or situation' is unclear; it should be 'in love or in a situation' for clarity and correctness.

× Sometimes I make it round Trump in home to buy me chocolates because I don't have any job.

✓ Sometimes I go around town at home to buy chocolates because I don't have a job.

The phrase 'make it round Trump in home' is incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'go around town' and 'at home'. Also, 'any job' should be 'a job' to indicate employment status.

× I'm I'm unemployed.

✓ I am unemployed.

The repetition 'I'm I'm' is incorrect. It should be simply 'I am unemployed.' This corrects the present tense and removes redundancy.

× Maybe chocolates was like my three meals throughout the day.

✓ Maybe chocolate was like my three meals throughout the day.

'Chocolates' is plural, but here it refers to chocolate in general as a substance, so singular 'chocolate' is appropriate. Also, 'was' agrees with singular 'chocolate'.

× Maybe chocolates was like my three meals throughout the day.

✓ Maybe chocolates were like my three meals throughout the day.

If 'chocolates' refers to multiple pieces, the verb should be plural 'were' to agree with the plural noun.

× There are many reasons because kids love chocolate and adults too but no more.

✓ There are many reasons; kids love chocolate and adults too, but not as much anymore.

The phrase 'because kids love chocolate' is incorrectly used after 'There are many reasons'. It should be separated properly. Also, 'no more' should be 'not as much anymore' for clarity.

× Not most of them but a 50% or adults do like chocolate but some places only area where kids to Tron Trump's in the house.

✓ Not most of them, but 50% of adults do like chocolate. In some places, only kids are allowed in the house.

The sentence is unclear and has plural/singular issues. 'a 50%' should be '50% of adults'. The phrase 'kids to Tron Trump's in the house' is unclear; assuming it means 'kids are allowed in the house'.

× So it's translating that's why that may be.

✓ So it's interesting; that's why that may be.

'Translating' is incorrect here; likely intended 'interesting'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; using a semicolon improves clarity.

× I like butter, milk chocolate or mixed chocolate and dark chocolate Every everything and.

✓ I like butter, milk chocolate, mixed chocolate, and dark chocolate—everything.

The phrase 'Every everything and' is incorrect. It should be 'everything' to indicate all types. Also, commas are needed to separate items in the list.

× Mostly I like to miss chocolate.

✓ Mostly, I like to mix chocolate.

'Miss chocolate' is incorrect; likely intended 'mix chocolate'. Also, a comma after 'Mostly' improves readability.

× Yes, if the person loves chocolate it can be used as gift.

✓ Yes, if the person loves chocolate, it can be used as a gift.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'gift'. Also, a comma after the conditional clause improves clarity.

× They would talk later by seeing if there's talk late they it would please them and make them happy.

✓ They would talk later; if they see the gift, it would please them and make them happy.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. Rephrasing clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.