Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to make your sentences clear and concise, for example, avoid repeating the word 'love' and correct spelling mistakes like 'Becauses' and 'test'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I enjoy sweet foods. My favourite chocolate is Dairy Milk, which is made by Cadbury.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more natural expressions and clearer structure. Instead of 'when I have a craving about eating some sweet things', you can say 'whenever I crave something sweet'. Also, try to keep your answer concise and avoid unnecessary words.

例: I often eat chocolate whenever I crave something sweet because it is my favourite treat.

提案: Your answer has several errors and unclear phrases like 'A refutable dead child'. Please avoid such confusing expressions. Instead, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting detail. Also, check grammar and sentence structure.

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate every day when I was a kid because I loved its sweet taste.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas in full sentences with proper grammar. Use linking words to connect your points logically. For example, explain that chocolate's sweetness and its role as a gift make it popular worldwide.

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste. Moreover, it is often given as a gift, which makes it special in many cultures.

提案: Your answer contains unclear phrases like 'uncle frivolous dynamic' which seem to be errors. Make sure to clearly state your favourite flavour or type of chocolate. Also, avoid repeating information unnecessarily.

例: As I mentioned earlier, my favourite chocolate is Dairy Milk, which is made by Cadbury.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear. To improve, correct minor grammar mistakes such as 'received' should be 'receive'. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, giving chocolate as a gift is very popular in my country. I also like to give and receive chocolates as presents.

× Becauses I love to eat sweet things and the chocolate is the one which I love the most.

✓ Because I love to eat sweet things, chocolate is the one I love the most.

The word 'Becauses' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'Because'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing 'the' before 'chocolate' and simplifying the relative clause for clarity.

× And my favorite chocolate test Dairy Milk, which is made by Cadbury.

✓ And my favorite chocolate is Dairy Milk, which is made by Cadbury.

The word 'test' is incorrect here; it should be 'is' to link the subject and predicate. This corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× I often eat chocolate when I have a craving about eating some sweet things as it's my favorite.

✓ I often eat chocolate when I have a craving for eating sweet things as it's my favorite.

The preposition 'about' is incorrect after 'craving'; the correct preposition is 'for' to express desire or longing.

× Yes, it is. A refutable dead child loves chocolate a lot.

✓ Yes, I do. A reputable dead child loves chocolate a lot.

'It is' is incorrect as a response to the question about past habits; 'I do' is appropriate. Also, 'refutable dead child' seems incorrect; possibly intended 'reputable' or 'a kid who loved chocolate a lot'. However, since 'dead' is likely a mistake, it should be corrected or omitted for clarity.

× So when I was kid I used to eat chocolate every day.

✓ So when I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate every day.

The singular noun 'kid' requires the article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× That's what my perspective.

✓ That's my perspective.

The phrase 'That's what my perspective' is ungrammatical; 'That's my perspective' is the correct form to express opinion.

× The chocolate is popular all over the globe. Do too.

✓ Chocolate is popular all over the globe, too.

'Do too' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'too' placed appropriately to indicate 'also'. Also, 'The chocolate' should be 'Chocolate' as a general statement.

× Its sweetness and taste and also it signifies or. No between aboard when we give each other out chocolate.

✓ Its sweetness and taste also signify bonding when we give each other chocolate.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Signifies or. No between aboard' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning about chocolate symbolizing bonding.

× As I mentioned earlier, my favorite uncle frivolous dynamic, which is a chocolate made by Cadbury.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, my favorite chocolate is Dairy Milk, which is made by Cadbury.

The phrase 'uncle frivolous dynamic' is nonsensical and likely a mishearing or typo. It should be corrected to 'chocolate is Dairy Milk' to make sense.

× Yes, it is often popular in my country to give chocolate to others as a gift.

✓ Yes, it is often popular in my country to give chocolate to others as gifts.

'As a gift' should be plural 'as gifts' to agree with 'others' indicating multiple recipients.

× So I also prefer to give it to others and received it as a gift.

✓ So I also prefer to give it to others and receive it as a gift.

The verb 'received' is past tense, but the sentence context requires present tense 'receive' to match 'prefer to give'.