Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意语法和发音。可以用简单句子直接说明喜欢巧克力的原因，并补充具体细节。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and delicious. Also, when I feel stressed from work or study, eating chocolate helps me relax.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不完整的问题，建议用完整句子表达频率和原因，避免重复和语法错误。

例: I usually eat chocolate about once a month because it contains a lot of fat and sugar, which is not very healthy. However, I enjoy it because it helps me relieve stress.

提案: 回答内容较好，但有语法错误和表达不清楚的地方，建议注意时态和句子结构，使表达更准确。

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my family was poor and couldn't afford expensive snacks. I think I had my first chocolate when I was a university student.

提案: 回答不够连贯且有语法错误，建议先明确观点，再用连词连接具体原因，表达要清晰自然。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious, which appeals to many people. Also, it is relatively affordable for most people.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议直接说明喜欢的口味并解释原因，避免犹豫和重复。

例: My favourite chocolate flavours are dark and milk chocolate because I enjoy the sweet taste of milk chocolate and the rich flavor of dark chocolate.

提案: 回答中表达不清楚且有语法错误，建议用简洁句子表达观点，并说明原因，注意句子结构和连贯性。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift for family and friends because it is popular and most people like to eat it. Also, if wrapped carefully, it looks attractive.

× Yeah, I I like eating chocolates because he's really sweet and delicious and sometimes when I feel very stressed there from my work or study, I would like to have a piece of chocolate to make my make myself a fail relaxed and the.

✓ Yeah, I like eating chocolates because they're really sweet and delicious and sometimes when I feel very stressed from my work or study, I would like to have a piece of chocolate to make myself feel relaxed.

The pronoun 'he's' is incorrectly used to refer to chocolates, which are plural and inanimate; the correct pronoun is 'they're'. Also, 'there from my work' is incorrect; it should be 'from my work'. The phrase 'make my make myself a fail relaxed and the' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'make myself feel relaxed'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Come. I'm not sure about maybe once a month. Uhm, because chocolate is is a full, full fat and sugar. So it's not that it's not good for my physical health, but I love to eat it. It's because it's gonna make me, I relieve my.

✓ I'm not sure, maybe once a month. Uhm, because chocolate is full of fat and sugar. So it's not good for my physical health, but I love to eat it because it helps me relieve stress.

The phrase 'a full, full fat and sugar' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'full of fat and sugar'. Also, 'it's gonna make me, I relieve my' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'it helps me relieve stress' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× No, not really because when I was a kid my family was very poor and my parents couldn't afford to buy any expensive for snacks for for me and my brother. So maybe the first chocolate I age was when I was a university student.

✓ No, not really because when I was a kid my family was very poor and my parents couldn't afford to buy any expensive snacks for me and my brother. So maybe the first chocolate I ate was when I was a university student.

The phrase 'any expensive for snacks for for me' is incorrect; it should be 'any expensive snacks for me'. Also, 'the first chocolate I age' is a typo and should be 'the first chocolate I ate' to correctly use the past tense verb.

× I think UM, the reasons may be required complex but e-mail opinion maybe it too. It is because the chocolate is is really sweet center delicious for everyone. At the same time, it's not that she quite expensive.

✓ I think, um, the reasons may be quite complex but in my opinion, it is because chocolate is really sweet and delicious for everyone. At the same time, it's not that expensive.

The phrase 'required complex' is incorrect; 'quite complex' is correct. 'E-mail opinion' is a mishearing or typo for 'my opinion'. 'The chocolate is is really sweet center delicious' is corrected to 'chocolate is really sweet and delicious'. 'It's not that she quite expensive' is incorrect; 'she' should be omitted and corrected to 'it's not that expensive'.

× Oh. I'm not sure. Uhm but most of time I preferred to buy black or milk chocolates because. I like, I like the flavor of milk. It is very uh. Sweet.

✓ Oh, I'm not sure. Uhm, but most of the time I prefer to buy dark or milk chocolates because I like the flavor of milk. It is very sweet.

'Most of time' should be 'most of the time'. 'Preferred' is past tense but the context suggests present preference, so 'prefer' is correct. 'Black' chocolate is more commonly called 'dark' chocolate. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I think it is very good to send a chocolate as a gate for our families and friends because it it it would be it wouldn't look very attractive when a wrapped up. I'm carefully. Also most of the people like to eat chocolate so it would be very appreciated.

✓ Yes, I think it is very good to send chocolate as a gift to our families and friends because it would look very attractive when wrapped up carefully. Also, most people like to eat chocolate so it would be very appreciated.

'Send a chocolate as a gate' is incorrect; it should be 'send chocolate as a gift'. The phrase 'it it it would be it wouldn't look very attractive when a wrapped up' is confusing and corrected to 'it would look very attractive when wrapped up carefully'. 'Most of the people' is better as 'most people'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.