Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid unnecessary words like 'Add' and use correct sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. Moreover, I prefer milk chocolate over dark chocolate because it tastes sweeter and creamier.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Please try to form complete sentences and explain your reasons clearly. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I eat chocolate regularly, especially when I feel sad or stressed, because it helps improve my mood and makes me feel better.

提案: Your answer is direct but could be improved by adding more specific details and linking words to enrich the response.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was my favourite treat and I enjoyed its sweet taste very much.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and lacks coherence. Try to use complete sentences and linking words to explain your ideas clearly and logically.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a sweet treat that people enjoy during special occasions and celebrations.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer more fluent.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is milk chocolate because it is sweet and creamy, unlike dark chocolate which tastes bitter to me.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use complete sentences and linking words to express your ideas clearly.

例: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a good idea because it is a sweet treat and in India, people often give sweets as presents during festivals and special occasions.

× Add I like eating milk chocolate more than dark chocolates.

✓ And I like eating milk chocolate more than dark chocolates.

The word 'Add' is incorrect here; the correct conjunction to connect ideas is 'And'. This improves sentence flow and clarity.

× I eat chocolate on regular basis.

✓ I eat chocolate on a regular basis.

The phrase 'on regular basis' is missing the article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'on a regular basis' to indicate frequency properly.

× Because whenever I feel sad.

✓ Because whenever I feel sad,

This is a sentence fragment; 'Because' introduces a dependent clause that needs a main clause to complete the sentence. It should be connected to the following sentence or restructured.

× Has pressed I eat chocolate and it. Blooms may. Hot.

✓ I eat chocolate when I feel stressed, and it makes me feel better.

The original sentence is unclear and fragmented. It seems to express that the student eats chocolate when stressed and it has a positive effect. The correction clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× becauses in. The Occasions.

✓ because on occasions,

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'in the Occasions' is incorrect preposition usage; 'on occasions' is correct.

× becauses. It has sweet in it.

✓ because it is sweet.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'has sweet in it' is awkward; 'is sweet' is more natural.

× becauses it. Is a sweet and in India people. Love to give gifts? As a sweet.

✓ because it is a sweet, and in India people love to give gifts as sweets.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. The sentence is fragmented and has unnecessary punctuation. Correcting conjunctions and sentence flow improves clarity.