Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to directly answer the question first, then explain with specific reasons. Avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'give a reminder for my mind' and 'which of leatherwork'. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me feel relaxed. Since childhood, I have enjoyed chocolate during my leisure time. Moreover, chocolate contains caffeine, which helps me stay alert when I am stressed or have to work hard.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Please answer the frequency question directly, then add details about your preference using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'awful in my perception'.

例: I eat chocolate quite often, usually a few times a week. I prefer solid chocolate because it has a better texture and taste. Specifically, I like dark chocolate made from 100% pure cocoa powder.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical errors. Try to answer directly, then explain with clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'my teats go to gum problems'.

例: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid. However, it caused gum problems, so my doctor advised me to reduce eating chocolate.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many errors. Please give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear terms like 'Co-op order' and 'indicator forum mind'.

例: To be honest, chocolate is popular worldwide because of its unique and delicious flavor. Additionally, it contains nutrients like antioxidants that can improve brain function, which makes it appealing to many people.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many mistakes. Please state your favourite flavour clearly, then explain why you like it using linking words. Avoid confusing phrases like 'vanilla gum when hillegom'.

例: To be honest, my favourite flavour of chocolate is vanilla. It has a unique taste that is sweet and smooth, which I really enjoy eating.

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear opinion, then support it with reasons using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like 'no person is should be recognized'.

例: Well, I personally think that almost everyone likes chocolate. Therefore, chocolate is a good choice to give as a gift to others.

× Whenever I was stressed and I had to work more, I'd chocolate because it gives it as a caffeine which of leatherwork will let their mind to work more.

✓ Whenever I was stressed and had to work more, I would eat chocolate because it contains caffeine which helps the brain to work more.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'd chocolate' which is incomplete and unclear. The modal verb 'would' should be followed by the base verb 'eat' to indicate habitual past action. Also, 'gives it as a caffeine' is incorrect; it should be 'contains caffeine'. The phrase 'which of leatherwork will let their mind to work more' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it is corrected to 'which helps the brain to work more' for clarity and correctness.

× Becauses chocolates contains caffeine.

✓ Because chocolate contains caffeine.

The word 'chocolates' is plural but the verb 'contains' is singular, causing a subject-verb agreement error. Also, 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'Because'. The correct singular noun 'chocolate' matches with the singular verb 'contains'.

× Well, since from my childhood I often like eating chocolate in my leisure time, I eat chocolate to give a reminder for my mind.

✓ Well, since my childhood, I have often liked eating chocolate in my leisure time; I eat chocolate to refresh my mind.

The phrase 'since from my childhood' is incorrect; 'since my childhood' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'to give a reminder for my mind' is awkward and unclear; 'to refresh my mind' is a clearer and more natural expression.

× I eat chocolate in its solid form becauses in solid form it is easy to eat and it is more texture and taste.

✓ I eat chocolate in its solid form because it is easier to eat and has more texture and taste.

The phrase 'it is more texture and taste' is incorrect; 'has more texture and taste' correctly uses the verb 'has' with the uncountable nouns 'texture' and 'taste'. Also, 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'.

× In this solid-state I also I often eat chocolates which like dark chocolate and made from 100% pure cocoa powder.

✓ In this solid state, I also often eat chocolates like dark chocolate made from 100% pure cocoa powder.

The phrase 'which like dark chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'like dark chocolate'. Also, 'solid-state' should be 'solid state' without a hyphen. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× Definitely when I was a kid, I I eat lot of chocolates at that time, my teats go to gum problems and I I went to doctor that he's he said that you should not eat chocolate.

✓ Definitely, when I was a kid, I ate a lot of chocolates. At that time, my teeth developed gum problems and I went to the doctor who said that I should not eat chocolate.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame. 'Teats' is a misspelling of 'teeth'. The phrase 'go to gum problems' is incorrect; 'developed gum problems' is correct. Also, 'I went to doctor that he's he said' is incorrect; it should be 'I went to the doctor who said'.

× So in this ways, as I described that I often eat chocolate many much.

✓ So in this way, as I described, I often eat a lot of chocolate.

'In this ways' should be 'in this way' (singular). 'Many much' is incorrect; 'a lot of' is the correct quantifier for uncountable nouns like 'chocolate'.

× Chocolate has as it's one of the exotic flavor that nobody another has.

✓ Chocolate has one of the most exotic flavors that no one else has.

The phrase 'has as it's one of the exotic flavor' is incorrect and redundant. 'Flavor' should be plural 'flavors' to agree with 'one of the'. 'Nobody another' is incorrect; 'no one else' is the correct phrase.

× It is rich in very in various nutrients like to Co-op order which is their indicator forum mind and help us to work more.

✓ It is very rich in various nutrients like copper, which is an indicator for the brain and helps us to work more.

The phrase 'rich in very in various nutrients' is incorrect; 'very rich in various nutrients' is correct. 'Co-op order' is a misspelling of 'copper'. 'Their indicator forum mind' is incorrect; it should be 'an indicator for the brain'.

× Chocolate is eaten by the world all over world very.

✓ Chocolate is eaten all over the world.

The phrase 'by the world all over world very' is incorrect and redundant. The correct phrase is 'eaten all over the world'.

× To be honnest, I personally think that my favorite flavor of chocolate is it's a vanilla gum when hillegom is the flavor of the chocolate with provides a different taste is like a vanilla taste, a gum taste or a Jelly taste.

✓ To be honest, I personally think that my favorite flavor of chocolate is vanilla gum. Hillegom is a flavor of chocolate that provides a different taste, like vanilla, gum, or jelly.

'Honnest' is a misspelling of 'honest'. The sentence is run-on and unclear; it is split into two sentences for clarity. 'It's a vanilla gum when hillegom is the flavor' is incorrect; corrected to 'my favorite flavor is vanilla gum. Hillegom is a flavor...'. 'With provides' is incorrect; 'that provides' is correct.

× It is very flavors and I often like to eat it.

✓ It has very distinct flavors and I often like to eat it.

'It is very flavors' is incorrect; 'It has very distinct flavors' correctly uses the verb 'has' with the plural noun 'flavors' and adds an adjective for clarity.

× Well, I personally think that at that time no person is should be recognized that does not like chocolate.

✓ Well, I personally think that there is no person who does not like chocolate.

The phrase 'no person is should be recognized' is incorrect modal verb usage and awkward. The correct expression is 'there is no person who does not like chocolate'.

× Chocolate is like by every person.

✓ Chocolate is liked by everyone.

'Is like by every person' is incorrect passive voice and pronoun use. The correct passive form is 'is liked by everyone'.

× So I think that the chocolate is can we gifted as a present.

✓ So I think that chocolate can be gifted as a present.

The phrase 'is can we gifted' is incorrect modal verb and passive voice usage. The correct form is 'can be gifted'.