Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子，注意时态和单复数，避免重复和无意义的词汇。

例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it is a delicious snack that helps me relax and relieve stress during my free time.

提案: 回答内容较简单，语法错误较多。建议使用更自然的表达，增加连接词，使句子更流畅。

例: I usually eat chocolate when I feel upset or stressed, especially before my period, because it helps me feel happier and more relaxed.

提案: 表达不清晰，语法错误严重，词汇使用不当。建议使用简单句子，注意时态和词汇搭配，避免拼写错误。

例: Yes, I loved eating chocolate when I was a child, but my parents often forbade me because they wanted me to eat healthy food and not eat too much chocolate.

提案: 回答较好，但有语法和拼写错误，影响表达。建议注意句子结构和拼写，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a long history and can be enjoyed in many forms. For example, people eat it as a sweet snack or drink it as hot chocolate.

提案: 句子结构不够准确，词汇使用不当。建议注意主谓一致，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I like many flavors of chocolate, but my favorite is milk chocolate because it has a creamy taste that makes me feel happy and satisfied.

提案: 表达混乱，语法错误多，句子不连贯。建议简化句子，注意语法和逻辑，使表达更清晰。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like it. Especially for university students, it can be a nice present and help build good relationships.

× Love meetings with food, especially the chocolate.

✓ Love eating food, especially chocolate.

这里动词后面应该接动名词形式，表示喜欢做某事。原句中'meetings'错误，应改为'eating'。

× I'm. I'm fun of eating chocolate because it not only. Canessa snack for me to enjoy my free time but also can relieve my stress when I ate it.

✓ I'm fond of eating chocolate because it is not only a nice snack for me to enjoy my free time but also can relieve my stress when I eat it.

句子结构混乱，'I'm fun of'应为'I'm fond of'，'Canessa'无意义，应改为'a nice'，时态应保持一致，'ate'改为'eat'。

× When I feel upset or before my period, becauses is a benefit way for me to relieve my pressure and make me feel happier.

✓ When I feel upset or before my period, because it is a beneficial way for me to relieve my pressure and make me feel happier.

'becauses'拼写错误，应为'because'，'benefit way'应为'beneficial way'，表示有益的方式。

× Sure, when I was a child I prayed real love to eat chocolate, but my parents always forbidden.

✓ Sure, when I was a child I really loved to eat chocolate, but my parents always forbade me.

'prayed real love'错误，应为'really loved'，'forbidden'是过去分词，句中应使用过去式'forbade'。

× Ann told me not to eat too much with food and so they also control my eating chocolate.

✓ And told me not to eat too much chocolate, so they also controlled my eating of chocolate.

'with food'用法错误，应直接说'eat too much chocolate'，'control'时态应与上下文一致，改为'controlled'，'my eating chocolate'应加介词'of'。

× Not only Kim people it is as a sweet snack, but it can also be used to make delicious drinks like hot chocolate.

✓ Not only do people eat it as a sweet snack, but it can also be used to make delicious drinks like hot chocolate.

'Kim people it is as'结构错误，应改为'people eat it as'，保持句子通顺。

× For me, I like to eat a lot of flavors, especially the milk chocolate are my favorite.

✓ For me, I like to eat a lot of flavors, especially milk chocolate which is my favorite.

'milk chocolate are'主谓不一致，milk chocolate是不可数名词，谓语应为单数'is'。

× I love the creamy in taste so it can make me feel happier and is truly delicious.

✓ I love the creamy taste because it can make me feel happier and is truly delicious.

'creamy in taste'表达不自然，应为'creamy taste'，连接词用'because'更合适。

× Definitely as not to die, a lot of people would like to. Purchased some chocolate as a present for people, especially the university student is not only came in as a great gift for them but also can build up the relationship.

✓ Definitely yes, a lot of people would like to purchase some chocolate as a present for others, especially university students. It is not only a great gift for them but also can help build up relationships.

句子结构混乱，'as not to die'无意义，应为'Definitely yes'，'Purchased'时态错误，应为'purchase'，'the university student'应为复数'university students'，'came in as'错误，应为'is'，'build up the relationship'应为'build up relationships'。