Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议使用正确的时态和更自然的表达方式，同时避免重复和冗余。

例: I used to like eating chocolate when I was a child, but now I don't enjoy it much because I find it too sweet and unhealthy.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达含糊且有语法错误，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I rarely eat chocolate nowadays. In fact, I can't even remember the last time I had some, but occasionally, if I see delicious chocolate while shopping, I might buy it.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不完整的句子，建议使用完整句子并注意时态一致，同时提供具体细节。

例: Yes, I often asked my parents to buy chocolate for me when I was a child. Sometimes, they gave it to me as a reward for getting good grades at school.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，词汇使用不准确，建议使用更准确的词汇和连贯的句子表达观点。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its taste. Also, there are various flavors available, so everyone can find one they like, which makes chocolate a source of happiness.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议使用完整句子并清晰表达个人喜好和原因。

例: My favorite flavor is original dark chocolate because I don't like sweet chocolate; it feels unhealthy to me.

提案: 回答表达不够流畅，建议使用连贯的句子并具体说明原因。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift, especially on Valentine's Day, because it symbolizes love and affection.

× When I was a child I like to eat chocolate but for now I'm not really like to eat it be 'cause I feels like the chocolate taste too sweet and it not healthy.

✓ When I was a child I liked to eat chocolate but now I don't really like to eat it because I feel like the chocolate tastes too sweet and it is not healthy.

这里涉及动词时态和主谓一致的问题。'like' 应该用过去式 'liked' 因为描述过去的习惯；'I'm not really like' 应改为 'I don't really like'，因为现在时态的否定表达；'feels' 应改为 'feel' 与主语 'I' 一致；'taste' 应加 's' 变为 'tastes' 因为主语是单数 'chocolate'；'it not healthy' 应改为 'it is not healthy'，缺少系动词。

× Well, I even can't remember what is the last time I ate chocolate.

✓ Well, I can't even remember when the last time I ate chocolate was.

这里时态和句子结构有误。'can't even remember' 是现在时，后面应接过去时间状语从句，'what is the last time' 结构不正确，应改为 'when the last time ... was'。

× Yeah, like I said, I don't really like to eat it, so sometimes if I. See some delicious chocolate your eyes shopping hour by hour boat, but I will eat.

✓ Yeah, like I said, I don't really like to eat it, but sometimes if I see some delicious chocolate while shopping, I will eat it.

句子结构混乱，断句错误。'if I. See' 应连成 'if I see'；'your eyes shopping hour by hour boat' 无意义，应改为 'while shopping'；缺少宾语 'it'。

× Yes, when I was a kid I always ask my parents to buy chocolate for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I always asked my parents to buy chocolate for me.

描述过去习惯时，动词应使用过去式，'ask' 应改为 'asked'。

× Sometimes they will. Bullet as a bonus when I. Get a great score in my school.

✓ Sometimes they would give me chocolate as a bonus when I got a great score in school.

'will' 用法不当，描述过去习惯应使用 'would'；'Bullet' 是错误单词，应为 'give me chocolate'；'Get' 应用过去式 'got'。

× Maybe. A lot of people like it or. There's a varity of chocolate so people can choose which favor of the chocolate they want or the truck.

✓ Maybe a lot of people like it, or there's a variety of chocolates so people can choose which flavor of chocolate they want or the type.

'varity' 拼写错误，应为 'variety'；'chocolate' 复数形式应为 'chocolates'；'favor' 拼写错误，应为 'flavor'；'truck' 词不达意，应改为 'type'。

× Well, I like the origin of flavor. IK specially the dark chocolate.

✓ Well, I like the original flavor, especially dark chocolate.

'origin of flavor' 用词不当，应为 'original flavor'；'IK specially' 拼写错误，应为 'I especially'。

× Like I said, I don't really like the. Sweet chocolate which is makes me feel a bit unhealthy so that's why.

✓ Like I said, I don't really like sweet chocolate because it makes me feel a bit unhealthy, so that's why.

'the. Sweet chocolate' 中 'the' 多余且断句错误；'which is makes' 结构错误，应为 'because it makes'。

× Yes, of course a lot of people will. Give the chocolate as a gift IK specially at the Valentine's Day.

✓ Yes, of course a lot of people will give chocolate as a gift, especially on Valentine's Day.

'will. Give' 断句错误，应连写；'IK specially' 拼写错误，应为 'especially'；'at the Valentine's Day' 介词用法错误，应为 'on Valentine's Day'。

× I think the chocolate. Shows something about love in it.

✓ I think chocolate shows something about love.

'the chocolate' 不需要定冠词；'shows something about love in it' 结构冗余，'in it' 多余。