Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat lengkap dan hindari kesalahan ejaan serta tata bahasa. Misalnya, gunakan 'I love all kinds of sweets, and chocolate makes me feel happy and relaxed.'

例: I like eating chocolate because I love all kinds of sweets, and chocolate makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Gabungkan kalimat-kalimat pendek menjadi kalimat yang lebih koheren dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih lancar. Contohnya, 'I usually eat chocolate once a week when I go to the supermarket.'

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week when I go to the supermarket.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih lengkap dan alami. Misalnya, 'Of course, I did. I have liked chocolate since I was a child.'

例: Of course, I did. I have liked chocolate since I was a child.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat jawaban lebih jelas dan terstruktur dengan menggunakan kata penghubung. Contohnya, 'Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is sweet and brings happiness to many people.'

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is sweet and brings happiness to many people.

提案: Gabungkan kalimat menjadi satu kalimat yang lengkap dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih alami. Contohnya, 'My favorite flavor is the original because it has a rich and authentic taste that I really enjoy.'

例: My favorite flavor is the original because it has a rich and authentic taste that I really enjoy.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan lengkap. Misalnya, 'Yes, it's a good idea to give chocolate as a gift, especially to someone special.'

例: Yes, it's a good idea to give chocolate as a gift, especially to someone special.

× I like eating chocolate because I. Love everything sweets.

✓ I like eating chocolate because I love everything sweet.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and punctuation. 'I. Love everything sweets.' should be one sentence without a period in the middle, and 'sweets' should be 'sweet' as an adjective describing 'everything'. The corrected sentence is 'I like eating chocolate because I love everything sweet.'

× An chocolate make me more happy an relax.

✓ Chocolate makes me happier and more relaxed.

'An chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is a non-count noun and does not need an article here. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'chocolate'. 'More happy' should be 'happier' (comparative adjective), and 'an relax' is incorrect; it should be 'more relaxed'.

× Maybe. Once in a week.

✓ Maybe once a week.

The original sentence is fragmented. 'Maybe.' and 'Once in a week.' should be combined into one sentence without a period in between. Also, 'in a week' is less natural than 'a week' in this context.

× I buy them. In every I go to the shop. To the supermarket.

✓ I buy them every time I go to the supermarket.

The original sentences are fragmented and incorrectly structured. 'In every I go to the shop. To the supermarket.' is not a correct sentence. It should be combined and rephrased as 'every time I go to the supermarket' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I like chocolate since I child.

✓ I have liked chocolate since I was a child.

The sentence uses present tense 'like' with 'since' which requires present perfect tense 'have liked'. Also, 'I child' is missing the verb 'was' and article 'a'. The correct form is 'since I was a child'.

× Because chocolate is sweets.

✓ Because chocolate is sweet.

'Sweets' is a plural noun meaning candies, but here 'sweet' is an adjective describing chocolate. The sentence should use the adjective form 'sweet'.

× Ann can bring happiness for everyone.

✓ And it can bring happiness to everyone.

'Ann' is likely a typo for 'And'. Also, 'bring happiness for everyone' should be 'bring happiness to everyone' because 'bring happiness to' is the correct collocation.

× Chocolate. A lot of like Joe Love, a lot of people like chocolate.

✓ A lot of people like chocolate, just like Joe.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It should be combined and rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× My favorite flavor is the original. Because it's rich, an authentic taste, and. I really enjoy.

✓ My favorite flavor is the original because it has a rich and authentic taste, and I really enjoy it.

The original sentences are fragmented and have incorrect article usage ('an authentic taste' is correct but the sentence is incomplete). Also, 'and.' is incorrect punctuation. The corrected sentence combines the ideas properly and adds 'it' at the end for clarity.

× Yes, it's a good idea if you want to give chocolate as a gift. Two others, especially if the special person.

✓ Yes, it's a good idea if you want to give chocolate as a gift to others, especially to a special person.

'Two others' is incorrect; it should be 'to others'. Also, 'if the special person' is incomplete and should be 'to a special person'. The preposition 'to' is necessary to indicate the recipient of the gift.