Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 发音与语法需要纠正并提高句子连贯性。回答要有明确主题句并用一到两句具体细节支持，用连接词使逻辑更清楚。注意时态和单复数（例如 “I am good at memorising” ，而不是 “I good at”），把“history”前后重复和冗余句子简化。

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, studying Chinese history and other subjects at secondary school required me to remember many dates and events, so I practised memorisation regularly and became stronger at it.

提案: 要直接回答问题并提供具体例子，避免含糊其辞。简化句子并修正语法（例如“I keep a schedule book”而不是“do our schedule book”；“I check it every day”而不是“wash it”）。可补充一次具体遗忘经历并说明后续改进措施。

例: Yes, I have forgotten something important a few times. Once I missed a meeting because I forgot to check my planner, so now I mark urgent items clearly and check my schedule book every morning to avoid that.

提案: 回答要更简洁并语法准确，先给主题句说明主要需要记住的事，然后用一到两句具体细节支持并用连接词。修正语法和用词（例如 “I need to remember which days I have lessons”）。避免重复表达。

例: Mostly I need to remember my work days because I’m a football coach. I must know which days I have lessons so I don’t miss coaching sessions and my students aren’t left without training.

提案: 表达要更清晰、有条理。先说主要方法（写在日程本上），然后补充辅助方法（提醒或与同事确认），并用连接词衔接。修正冗余和重复（例如去掉重复的 “make sure”）。

例: I usually write important dates and tasks in my planner to remember them. In addition, I set reminders on my phone and check plans with my colleague daily to make sure nothing is missed.

× Yes, I think I good at memorising things because I study Chinese history in and history in my secondary school be my native subjects.

✓ Yes, I think I'm good at memorising things because I studied Chinese history and history in my secondary school as my main subjects.

句中缺少助动词“am”，主句应为现在时的“I'm”。原句还混乱地使用“study”与“in and history in”，并且“be my native subjects”结构不正确。将时间保持为过去式（因为是在中学时期）并用正确的词序和介词表达：用“studied...in my secondary school”或“studied...as my main subjects”。建议：注意主语和be动词配合，整理句子结构，明确时态。

× The two subjects required the high memory risk, ability to memorize other histories.

✓ These two subjects required a high memory ability to memorize historical facts.

原句中的“the high memory risk”用词不当且意义不明，应使用“a high memory ability”或“a high level of memory”。另外“other histories”应更具体为“historical facts”。建议使用正确的名词短语来表达“高记忆力”。

× So yeah, I think I'm good at memorise.

✓ So yeah, I think I'm good at memorising.

在“good at”后应接动名词（-ing形式），不是不定式。建议记住固定搭配：good/ bad/ adept at + verb-ing。

× Yeah, I think maybe just a few times that I forgot something important because I do our schedule book.

✓ Yeah, I think maybe just a few times I forgot something important because I used our schedule book.

叙述过去发生的事情应使用过去时。原句中“do our schedule book”时态不对且表达不自然，应改为“used our schedule book”或“kept a schedule book”。建议一致使用过去时描述过去的习惯或事件。

× I will mark all the things that is important in my schedule book and I will wash it every day.

✓ I will mark all the things that are important in my schedule book and I will check it every day.

“that is important”中的关系代词指代复数“things”，动词应为“are”。另外“wash it every day”用词不当，应为“check it every day”（每天查看）。建议注意主谓一致与搭配用词。

× So I just, uh, maybe a few time that I forgot something important.

✓ So I just, uh, maybe a few times I forgot something important.

“a few time”应为复数“a few times”。建议区分可数名词单复数用法。

× I think I need to remember which day I need to go to work because I'm a football coach.

✓ I think I need to remember which days I need to go to work because I'm a football coach.

如果指多天需要记住，应使用复数“which days”。原句单复数不一致。建议明确指代是单一天还是多天并相应使用单复数。

× So I need to remember which day I need to have a lesson, which day I have not have that lesson.

✓ So I need to remember which days I have lessons and which days I don't have lessons.

原句“have not have”结构错误，应使用助动词“do”构成否定“don't have”。同时用复数“days”更自然。建议用正确的助动词和否定形式。

× So, so if I forgot it that the student will without the coach cannot have lesson.

✓ So if I forget it, the students won't be able to have the lesson without a coach.

原句时态混乱且句子结构不正确。把条件句统一为现在时（if I forget）表示习惯性或未来可能性，后句用情态动词“will”或简 contracted “won't be able to”更自然，且名词复数与冠词使用需正确（the student -> the students；add 'a' coach）。建议整理条件句时态并使用正确的被动/能力表达。

× I think I will jot down in my schedule book that is something important days or important things that will happen.

✓ I think I will jot down in my schedule book important days or important things that will happen.

“jot down”后不需要“that is”，直接跟宾语。原句多余“that is”，使结构笨拙。建议简化句子，直接列出要记的内容。

× So I will chat my partner every day.

✓ So I will chat with my partner every day.

动词“chat”通常需与介词“with”连用表示“与某人聊天”。原句缺少介词。建议记住动词与介词的固定搭配。

× So I make sure that make sure that I will not forget.

✓ So I make sure that I will not forget.

原句中重复“make sure that”导致冗余，只需保留一次。建议避免重复表达，保持句子简洁。