Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid unnecessary phrases like 'I'm not at all' repeated negatives, and correct grammar: say 'I have short-term memory' or 'I have a poor short-term memory.' Add one brief reason or example and keep it under 4–5 sentences. Use linking words if you add details (for example, 'so' or 'because').

例: Not really. I have fairly poor short-term memory, so I often forget small details like where I put my keys. Because of that, I try to make lists or set phone reminders.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then a specific example. Avoid vague phrases like 'many times' and 'etcetera.' Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'for instance' and provide one brief consequence or reaction to make the answer more informative.

例: Yes, I have. For example, I once forgot my sister's birthday and felt really embarrassed. Since then, I set calendar reminders to avoid repeating the mistake.

提案: Be specific and organized. Start with a topic sentence naming the most important things you must remember, then give 2–3 concrete examples. Avoid listing people without clarity ('my mom, other members') and avoid 'etcetera.' Use linking words like 'such as' and 'for example.'

例: In daily life I need to remember a few key things, such as passwords and my ATM PIN for banking. I also remember appointments and tasks for my family members, for example buying groceries or picking up my sister from work.

提案: Make the answer natural and grammatically correct with a clear structure: topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' and avoid repetition ('reminder' repeated). Mention specific tools or methods and briefly explain why they help.

例: I rely on my phone to remember important things. For example, I set calendar events and alarms for dates and use a notes app for passwords and to-do lists, so I get notifications in time to act.

× I'm not at all good at memorizing things because I'm having short term memory.

✓ I'm not at all good at memorizing things because I have short-term memory.

The phrase 'I'm having' uses the present continuous, which is incorrect for a general state; use simple present 'I have'. Also 'short term' should be hyphenated as 'short-term' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Suggestion: use simple present for states and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× Yes, I have forgotten many times, especially like birthday or anniversary date or exam dates etcetera.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten many times, especially birthdays, anniversaries, or exam dates.

The original mixes singular and plural and uses 'like' unnecessarily. Use the present perfect 'I have forgotten' is fine for repeated past events; plural nouns 'birthdays' and 'anniversaries' suit 'many times'. Remove 'date' after each and replace 'etcetera' with a cleaner list. Also commas and conjunctions corrected for parallel structure.

× I have to remember my password and my ATM card pin, my mom, other members, daily living things, etcetera.

✓ I have to remember my password and my ATM card PIN, my mother's birthday and other family members' birthdays, and daily necessities.

The original lists items unclearly and uses 'my mom, other members' which is vague and missing possessive forms. 'ATM card pin' should be 'ATM card PIN' (PIN capitalized) and 'my mom' should be expressed with a possessive for a birthday example. 'Daily living things' is vague; use 'daily necessities'. Ensure parallel structure in lists and correct possessive forms.

× I will remember the important things by keeping a short note in reminder and especially I will keep some important dates in reminder so my phone will remember remind me on that occasion.

✓ I remember important things by keeping short notes and setting reminders, and I especially put important dates in my phone so it will remind me on those occasions.

The original mixes future 'I will' and awkward phrasing. For habitual actions use simple present 'I remember' or 'I keep'. 'Keeping a short note in reminder' is incorrect; use 'keeping short notes' and 'setting reminders'. Also 'will remember remind me' is redundant; use 'it will remind me'. Use plural 'occasions' for multiple dates and possessive 'my phone'.