Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、简洁并直接回应问题。现在句子有重复（"I have I have"）、语法错误（"I can recited"）、不必要的片段（"In a short"）。建议：1) 开头直接给出观点（肯定或否定），2) 用一到两句具体例子支持，避免重复，3) 注意时态和动词形式，4) 控制在最多五句内并使用连词（e.g. because, for example）。具体练习：改正动词形式，多用自然表达如“do well in exams”或“memorise passages”。

例: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising. For example, I usually do well in exams because I review and memorise key passages from my textbooks. This helps me recall facts quickly during tests.

提案: 回答需要更清晰且语法正确。存在时态混乱（"have remember", "have forgot"）、重复（"send send"）和不自然词汇（"mission"用于此情境）。建议：1) 用简单过去时描述已发生的事件，2) 用更自然的词汇如 "task" 或 "errand"，3) 加入原因或感受使回答更完整，4) 避免重复并控制句子数量。

例: Yes, I once forgot an important errand. A few weeks ago I was supposed to deliver lunch to my mentor in hospital, but I forgot that morning and my colleagues had to remind me. I felt embarrassed because it was an important responsibility.

提案: 回答含义不够清楚，句子结构混乱（"bring my kids for dormitories", "I can get in my UH dormitory"），以及时态问题（"I have forgot"）。建议：1) 用清晰的短句列出日常必须记住的事情，2) 使用准确表达（例如 "drop my kids off at their dorm" 或 "let my kids into the dormitory"），3) 给出频率或后果以增加细节，4) 注意语法与时态一致。

例: I need to remember several daily tasks. The most important is to drop my kids off at their dormitory every morning, because otherwise they can't get in. I also have to feed my pets every day, which I usually do after work.

提案: 表达有些重复（多次使用"always"）且部分句子不完整（"take the important things I have to do down on a paper or without a paper"，"set a clock that when the time I need"）。建议：1) 用简洁句子说明主要方法，2) 说明具体工具（notes, phone reminders, alarms）及如何使用，3) 使用连词提升连贯性，4) 控制句子数量并纠正语法。

例: I use several methods to remember important things. I write tasks on paper or in my phone, and I set alarms or reminders so I never forget. For example, I set a morning alarm to remind me to drop my kids at their dorm.

× Well, I think I am and I believe that memorizing is one of the most important abilities in study and learning.

✓ Well, I think I am, and I believe that memorizing is one of the most important abilities in studying and learning.

句中使用名词短语“in study and learning”不自然。此处应使用现在分词作动名词短语“studying and learning”表示“在学习方面”。建议将名词“study”改为动名词“studying”。

× For example, I have I have good performances in so many exams and I can recited the textbook.

✓ For example, I have good results in many exams and I can recite the textbook quickly.

“performances”用法不当，表示“表演”，此处应用“results”或“grades”。“so many exams”冗余，可改为“many exams”。动词“recited”时态错误，应用不定式/原形“recite”。建议使用“good results in many exams”并把“recited”改为“recite”。

× In a short.

✓ In short.

惯用表达为“In short”表示“简而言之”。“In a short”是错误搭配，去掉不定冠词“a”。

× Yeah, I have remember that several weeks ago I had a mission that to send send a lunch for my mentor who has been in hospital.

✓ Yeah, I remember that several weeks ago I had a task to send lunch to my mentor who was in the hospital.

“have remember”混合现在完成时与动词原形，应用一般过去或现在完成时之一；句中时间状语“several weeks ago”表过去，应用一般过去时“remember”。“mission”措辞不自然，改为“task”；“to send send a lunch”有重复且冠词多余，改为“to send lunch”；“has been in hospital”用法不当，描述过去事件应用过去时“was in the hospital”。建议使用一般过去时并修正词汇与重复。

× But at that morning I have forgot that and my colleagues have reminded me of that.

✓ But that morning I forgot, and my colleagues reminded me.

时间状语“that morning”指过去，句中使用现在完成时“have forgot/reminded”不合适，应使用一般过去时“forgot/reminded”。另外，“have forgot”是混合错误，正确的过去分词是“forgot”或“forgotten”但此处用过去式更合适。可简化为“that morning I forgot, and my colleagues reminded me”。

× Well, the most important thing I can't forget is I must bring my kids for dormitories.

✓ Well, the most important thing I can't forget is that I must bring my kids to the dormitory.

“bring my kids for dormitories”介词使用错误且名词复数/单数不当。应使用“bring ... to the dormitory”或“to their dormitories”。另外“is I must”在名词性从句中应加连词“that”更清晰。建议使用“that I must bring my kids to the dormitory”。

× Without it, I can get in my UH dormitory and I have forgot that for several times.

✓ If I don't, I can't get into my UH dormitory, and I have forgotten that several times.

原句逻辑与时态混乱。应使用条件句“If I don't”或“Without it”后接否定结果“can't get into”。“get in”常用“get into”表示进入。过去多次发生应使用现在完成时“have forgotten”而非“have forgot”。“for several times”应改为“several times”（去掉“for”）。建议改为“If I don't, I can't get into my UH dormitory, and I have forgotten that several times.”

× And apart from that, I have the mission to feed my pets every day.

✓ And apart from that, I have the task of feeding my pets every day.

“have the mission to feed”搭配生硬，常用“have the task of doing”或“am responsible for feeding”。将不定式改为动名词“feeding”更自然。建议使用“the task of feeding my pets every day”。

× Well, I always take the important things I have to do down on a paper or without a paper.

✓ Well, I always write down the important things I have to do, on paper or not.

“take ... down on a paper”表达错误，习惯用法是“write something down”或“take something down”。“on a paper or without a paper”不自然，改为“on paper or not”。建议使用“write down the important things”并简化短语。

× I always text it on my phone as a reminder so that I can never forget it.

✓ I always text it to my phone as a reminder so that I never forget it.

动词“text”后常接介词“to”或直接接人/设备，此处更自然为“text it to my phone”或“text a reminder to myself”。另外“can never forget”与语境冲突，通常用“never forget”更简洁。建议使用“I always text it to my phone as a reminder so that I never forget it.”

× I also can set a clock that when the time I need to do something that is.

✓ I can also set an alarm for the time when I need to do something.

原句结构混乱且冗余。“set a clock that when the time I need to do something that is”语序错误。常用表达是“set an alarm for the time when I need to do something”或“set a reminder”. 建议重组句子为“I can also set an alarm for the time when I need to do something.”