Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and article use, and briefly explain the technique with a linking phrase. Keep it within three sentences and avoid vague words like "unique" without brief explanation.

例: Yes, I think I'm quite good at memorising things. For example, I use a technique called "Lian Xiang," which links images to words to help me remember vocabulary for a long time.

提案: Clarify the event and use past tense consistently. Give a clear topic sentence stating you forgot something, then describe what you forgot, why, and the result. Use linking words like "for example" and "as a result". Avoid fragmented sentences and fix vocabulary errors (e.g., "take care of" not "take case").

例: Yes, once I forgot my apartment keys this morning. For example, I realised I needed to return home to collect them, which wasted time, and as a result I was late for my appointment.

提案: Be concise and structured. Start with a topic sentence naming specific items (appointments, tasks, deadlines). Use linking words like "for example" and explain why you sometimes forget written notes. Correct grammar and punctuation and avoid informal contractions like "'cause".

例: Mostly I need to remember daily tasks and appointments, such as study sessions and errands. For example, I write a to-do list on paper, but I sometimes forget to check it, so I try to set phone reminders as well.

提案: Make the method clear and compare tools briefly. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide a linking phrase to contrast paper and phone use and explain why you prefer one. Keep to two or three concise sentences.

例: I usually write important things on paper because physical notes help me remember better. However, I also save some reminders on my phone for convenience and alarms when I worry I might forget.

× Yes, I suppose I'm the kind of person who excel at memorizing things.

✓ Yes, I suppose I'm the kind of person who excels at memorizing things.

The relative clause subject 'who' refers to 'person' (singular), so the verb must take third person singular form 'excels'. Use 'excels' to match subject-verb agreement.

× I have unique memory approaches to help me remember things for a long time, such as Lian Xiang.

✓ I have unique memory techniques, such as Lian Xiang, that help me remember things for a long time.

'Approaches' is acceptable but 'techniques' is more natural here; the original sentence has awkward word order. Rearranging to place the example next to the noun and adding a relative clause 'that help...' clarifies meaning and ensures correct verb agreement.

× Yes, I had an experience of getting something important or take this morning for example, I've got to take case of my apartment, so I have to return to my home to bring them back.

✓ Yes, I once had an experience this morning: I had to take care of something important in my apartment, so I had to return home to get it.

The original mixes tenses and has incorrect expressions ('take case of', 'bring them back'). Use past simple 'had' and 'had to return' for a completed action this morning. Replace 'take case of' with 'take care of' and ensure pronoun number matches ('it' for singular).

× It wasted my time, so I was late on my.

✓ It wasted my time, so I was late.

The phrase 'late on my' is ungrammatical. Simply say 'I was late.' If additional context is needed, add 'for work' or 'for the appointment.' Keep the verb and subject clear.

× In my daily life I need to remember things that I need to complete in the day, that is To Do List Even though I have written a studies on paper but I also need to keep them in mind 'cause I just forget to watch this paper.

✓ In my daily life I need to remember the tasks I must complete each day, that is, my to-do list. Even though I sometimes write notes on paper, I also need to keep them in mind because I often forget to look at the paper.

Multiple issues: article and noun usage ('a studies' is wrong), punctuation and capitalization, and word choice ('watch this paper'). Use 'the tasks' or 'my to-do list' and 'write notes' or 'write things down.' Replace 'watch' with 'look at' and use 'because' in place of informal ''cause' for clarity.

× I often remember important things through writing them down on paper because they are helpful in reminding me of these things and I'm not used to keep them.

✓ I often remember important things by writing them down on paper because the notes help remind me, and I'm not used to keeping everything in my head.

Use 'by' + ing to express method ('by writing'). 'Used to keep' is incorrect; use 'used to keeping' or better 'not used to keeping everything in my head.' Also clarify what 'them' refers to ('notes' or 'things').

× Keeping them in on my phone 'cause I like the personal touch.

✓ I also keep them on my phone because I like the convenience and personal touch.

Remove extra preposition 'in' and use 'on my phone.' Expand ''cause' to 'because' and clarify meaning by choosing 'convenience' or 'personal touch.' Ensure sentence is complete with a subject if needed ('I also keep...').