Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No/Sometimes), then give one or two specific, well-structured supporting details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid repetitions and unclear words; pronounce and choose words correctly (e.g., "vocabulary" instead of "flucaports," "biology" instead of "bio" if needed).

例: Sometimes. I’m better at memorising facts for biology because I study names and functions regularly, but I find it harder to learn English vocabulary quickly. For example, I can easily remember biological terms like "mitochondria" because I review them often, but English words fade if I don’t practise them.

提案: Give a single clear anecdote with a logical sequence: what happened, how you felt, and the result. Use simple past consistently and avoid repetition. Include one linking phrase (e.g., "For example", "As a result").

例: Yes. Once I forgot my phone at home before a trip and I felt very worried because my mother was angry. Fortunately, the trip went smoothly and nothing bad happened, so I learned to double-check my bag before leaving.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence about key daily items or tasks, then give specific reasons and one consequence. Reduce filler words and correct grammar (e.g., "there have been several times I've forgotten it"). Use linking words like "because" or "so".

例: I need to remember my phone and keys every day because I often leave them behind and then I can’t get into places or contact anyone. For instance, I once missed an important appointment because I forgot my keys, so now I check my bag before I leave.

提案: Organise your answer: start with the main methods you use, then give a brief example for one method. Use correct verb forms and concise linking words (e.g., "For tasks with deadlines, I set alarms; for general reminders, I use notes").

例: I use several methods to remember important things. For tasks with a specific time, I set alarms on my phone, and for general tasks I write notes in the notes app. For example, before exams I set multiple alarms and add study tasks to my notes so I don’t forget.

× Sometimes, not always, it depends of the time.

✓ Sometimes, not always; it depends on the time.

Use 'depends on' not 'depends of'. The correct preposition after 'depend' is 'on'. Also replace comma with semicolon or restructure for clarity.

× For example, for example for English exams are not really good at memorizing the flucaports, while for bio exams and really good to talk about memorizing biological tourism and specific biological names, body parts.

✓ For example, for English exams I'm not really good at memorizing vocabulary, while for biology exams I'm good at remembering biological terms and specific names of body parts.

The original sentence has missing subject and verb, repetitions, and wrong word choices ('flucaports','tourism'). Fix by supplying subject 'I' and verbs 'am' and 'remembering', use correct nouns 'vocabulary' and 'terms'. This addresses sentence structure and word choice; ensure coherence and proper verb forms.

× Many times once I've forgotten my phone at home while I was going on a trip.

✓ Many times, once I forgot my phone at home while I was going on a trip.

Use past simple 'forgot' for a past event rather than present perfect with 'once' in this context. Also remove redundant 'many times once' — keep either 'many times' or 'once' depending on meaning. Here corrected to past simple.

× My mom my mom was going was going to kill me.

✓ My mom was going to kill me.

The sentence repeats phrases unnecessarily. Remove duplication and keep correct subject and verb. This fixes pronoun repetition and improves clarity.

× But I thank God it went smooth this time and nothing had bad happened.

✓ But I thanked God it went smoothly this time and nothing bad happened.

Use past simple 'thanked' for a completed past action; use adverb 'smoothly' to modify 'went'; use correct word order 'nothing bad happened' not 'had bad happened'. Avoid past perfect unless showing an earlier past event.

× Well it depends but I think I I can always remember to get my phone whenever I get out of the house because there is like several times I've forgotten and there it happened.

✓ Well, it depends, but I think I can usually remember to take my phone whenever I leave the house because there have been several times I've forgotten and problems happened then.

Use 'usually' instead of 'always' if the speaker means often; remove duplicate 'I'; use 'take' rather than 'get' for phone; use 'leave' instead of 'get out of' for natural phrasing; use present perfect 'have been' for repeated past occurrences and fix word order and tense consistency.

× A big problems happened and my mom always so furious about this problem and she screams on me too much about it.

✓ Big problems happened, and my mom was always so furious about them that she screamed at me a lot about it.

Use correct agreement: 'Big problems' plural so don't use 'a'; use past tense 'was' and 'screamed'; use preposition 'at' with 'scream at someone'; 'a lot' is more natural than 'too much' for frequency. Ensure noun-pronoun agreement ('them').

× Sometimes I put alarms on my phone please mentioning what important things I have to do.

✓ Sometimes I set alarms on my phone that mention the important things I have to do.

Use 'set alarms' not 'put alarms'; use a relative clause 'that mention' rather than 'please mentioning'. The gerund 'mentioning' was used incorrectly; replace with finite verb 'mention' within a relative clause.

× Sometimes I let my mom remember reminds me about them.

✓ Sometimes I ask my mom to remind me about them.

The original mixes 'let' and 'remember/reminds' incorrectly. Use 'ask someone to remind me' or 'my mom reminds me'. Correct pronoun and verb structure: 'remind me' is the correct verb and object pronoun.

× It depends on the thing I want to be remembered of, if there is a duration of time or no.

✓ It depends on the thing I want to remember and whether there is a time frame or not.

Do not use 'remembered of'; use active 'want to remember'. Use 'whether' for alternatives and 'time frame' for clarity. 'Or no' should be 'or not'.