Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation and repetition, and give one specific example with linking words (for example/so) to explain how you remember things. Improve grammar by avoiding awkward phrases like "past life" and use correct verb forms.

例: Yes, I am fairly good at memorising things. For example, when I see a place or object that I encountered before, it triggers a clear memory of the event, so I can recall details easily.

提案: Give a clear, concise account with correct tense and fewer repetitions. Start with a topic sentence admitting the mistake, then briefly describe what happened and why, using linking words such as "because" or "so". Use past simple correctly (e.g., "I missed the interview").

例: Yes, I did. Two years ago I missed an important job interview because I changed the date in my calendar and then forgot the new schedule, so I didn't attend.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence and concise supporting detail. Reduce filler words and explain how the method helps you, using linking words like "so" or "for example." Use correct nouns (e.g., "notebook" instead of "book copy book").

例: I need to remember daily tasks and appointments, so I keep a notebook where I write everything down; when I review it in the evening, I easily remember what I have done and what I must do next.

提案: Provide a clear, structured answer: topic sentence then specific examples. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., "I write a note and put it on the fridge or my daughter's door"). Mention why this method works and link ideas with words like "for example" or "because."

例: I write important reminders on small notes and put them on the fridge or my daughter's bedroom door; because I see them every day, they reliably help me remember appointments and tasks.

× Yes, of course I'm good at, uh, remembering the things.

✓ Yes, of course I'm good at remembering things.

Remove the unnecessary comma and article 'the'. 'Good at remembering' uses the gerund; 'the things' is vague and unneeded. Suggestion: use 'remembering things' for natural phrasing.

× How, how can I remember?

✓ How can I remember?

Extra filler 'How,' repeats unnecessarily. Remove repetition to form a correct question structure: 'How can I remember?'.

× For example, if I see something, I remember my past life when I did or, uh, when I acted something uh, after the some years, if I see that, I remember that.

✓ For example, if I see something, I remember my past experiences when I did or acted something; after some years, if I see that, I remember it.

Use 'past experiences' instead of 'past life' for intended meaning. 'Did or acted something' awkward—use 'did something' or 'acted' with an object. Remove 'the' before 'some years' and use 'it' instead of repeated 'that'. Maintain present tense for general statements; use clearer noun phrases.

× Yes, of course, two years ago, I forgot the most important thing in my life at that time.

✓ Yes, of course; two years ago I forgot the most important thing in my life at that time.

Main verb 'forgot' is correct past tense. Fix punctuation and remove extra comma after 'of course' for smoother speech. The tense and meaning are appropriate.

× I have to I have I had to go to the job interview at that time.

✓ I had to go to a job interview at that time.

Use simple past 'had to' to match 'two years ago'. Remove repeated fragments. Use 'a job interview' (indefinite article) for a single interview.

× I I changed the day, so I forgot to went.

✓ I changed the day, so I forgot to go.

After 'forgot to' the base form of the verb is required: 'forgot to go' not 'forgot to went'. Also remove repeated 'I'.

× I, I, I have a, my daily book copy book I wrote, uh, I write the things which, uh, I did so, uh, I can remember easily when I read it.

✓ I have a daily notebook where I write the things I did, so I can remember them easily when I read it.

Replace awkward 'my daily book copy book' with 'daily notebook'. Use present simple 'write' for habitual action is acceptable; keep consistency: 'I write the things I did' mixes present and past—better 'I write the things I do' or 'I write the things I did' depending on intended meaning. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'things'.

× If there is something so important for me, I wrote a small piece of the paper and put it in front of the me, like my daughter or fridge, like this kind of things.

✓ If something is very important to me, I write a small note on a piece of paper and put it somewhere obvious, like on the fridge or in front of my daughter.

Use present simple 'is' and habitual 'write/put' for regular actions, not past 'wrote'. 'So important' is informal—use 'very important'. 'A small piece of the paper' should be 'a piece of paper' or 'a small note on a piece of paper'. 'In front of the me' is incorrect; use 'in front of my daughter' or 'on the fridge'. Clarify location. Ensure consistent tense.

× I mark it and then when I see I remember.

✓ I mark it, and when I see it, I remember.

Add the object 'it' after 'see' for clarity. Use commas for readability. The verbs 'mark' and 'remember' are correct; ensure pronoun reference is clear.