Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Clarify unclear phrases (e.g., 'credit') and use correct collocations such as 'memorize drug names' or 'memorize medications and their generic names.'

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, in my medical studies I quickly memorise drug names and their generic equivalents, which helps me recall medications during clinical practice.

提案: Use a clear past-tense narrative with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a consequence. Remove repetitions and hesitations, and use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to explain results.

例: Yes, once during my NCLEX exam I forgot the name of a medication. Because I couldn't recall it quickly, I felt stressed and had difficulty answering that question.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence and then list specific items using linking words (for example, 'such as' or 'including'). Fix grammar (e.g., 'patients' preferences, allergies, and doctors' orders').

例: In my daily life I need to remember clinical details, such as patients' preferences, any allergies they have, and doctors' orders, because these affect patient safety and care decisions.

提案: Give a clear main method then a supporting detail explaining how it helps. Use correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'I memorise' or 'I take short notes') and avoid negatives like 'couldn't able.'

例: I usually memorise key facts, and I also take short written notes to ensure I don't miss anything important; these notes help me review tasks quickly before I act.

× Yes, I\'m really good at memorizing things as and my and my medical field for the medicines I need to memorize.

✓ Yes, I\'m really good at memorizing things, especially in my medical field for the medicines I need to memorize.

The original sentence is awkward and contains repetition and missing connector words. This is primarily a sentence structure error and problematic word choice; correcting to 'especially in my medical field' clarifies the meaning and removes repeated words. Keep consistent verb form 'memorizing.'

× So most of the time umm I quickly memorize the medication, generic name and credit.

✓ So most of the time I quickly memorize the medication names, including the generic names and trade names.

The list items were unclear and 'credit' is incorrect word choice. This is a sentence structure and word choice problem. Use plural 'names' and replace 'credit' with 'trade names' to convey intended meaning clearly.

× Yes, I remember that the time I was giving my NCLEX exam, I forgot one of the medication name at the same time at the exam center.

✓ Yes, I remember the time I was taking my NCLEX exam; I forgot one of the medication names while I was at the exam center.

Errors: incorrect verb collocation 'was giving' (use 'taking' for an exam), singular 'name' should be plural 'names', and awkward phrase 'at the same time at the exam center.' This is mainly past tense and singular/plural issues plus sentence structure. Use past continuous 'was taking' and plural 'names'.

× So it was really hard for me to remember that the the drug name and as I need to answer the question as well.

✓ So it was really hard for me to remember the drug name, and I also needed to answer the question.

Repetitive 'the the,' incorrect tense/structure 'as I need' (mixes present with past). This is a past tense and sentence structure problem. Use past 'needed' to match past context and simplify the clause.

× So that was the time I forget.

✓ So that was the time I forgot.

Incorrect verb tense 'forget' (present) in a past context. Use past tense 'forgot' to agree with surrounding past-tense narration.

× Most of the time I need to remember my patients preferences are any allergic or any doctor's order.

✓ Most of the time I need to remember my patients' preferences, any allergies, and any doctor's orders.

Multiple issues: missing apostrophe for possessive 'patients'', incorrect structure 'are any allergic' and singular 'order' when multiple orders possible. This is incorrect pronoun/possessive and sentence structure. Use plural nouns and parallel structure: 'preferences, any allergies, and any doctor's orders.'

× Is I memorize them or most of the time I love to take small notes as well so that I couldn't able to miss any important note.

✓ I memorize them, or most of the time I like to take small notes so that I don\'t miss any important information.

Problems: starting with 'Is' is incorrect; 'love to take' is acceptable but 'like to take' is more natural; 'couldn't able to' is ungrammatical (double modal/ability). This is a verb + -ing/form and modal usage issue. Use simple present 'memorize' and 'like to take', and replace 'couldn't able to miss' with 'don\'t miss.'