Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you are good at memorising things, then give one or two specific supporting reasons or an example. Use correct grammar (e.g., present simple), avoid repetition, and keep sentences short (max 3–4). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. Because I study regularly and revise my notes every day, I can remember facts and vocabulary more easily. For example, when preparing for exams I use short summaries and flashcards to review information effectively.

提案: Answer clearly and give a specific brief example with correct tense and vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence (Yes/No + short statement), then describe what happened using past simple, and finish with a consequence. Avoid fragmented clauses and improve clarity by naming documents correctly.

例: Yes, I have. Last week I forgot to bring my Aadhaar card when I went to apply for my passport. Because I didn't have that document, the office rejected my application and I had to return home and come back another day.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence about what you need to remember, then add one or two specific reasons or habits. Use natural collocations (e.g., 'keep track of my calories', 'stay healthy') and linking words like 'because' to explain why. Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

例: I need to remember to keep track of my calories every day because maintaining a healthy diet is important for fitness. For instance, I use a phone app to log what I eat so I can control portion sizes and stay healthy.

提案: Give a direct method you use to remember things and support it with a short specific example. Avoid vague or unrelated statements about others. Use clear grammar and linking words (e.g., 'so', 'for example'). Mention practical techniques like lists, alarms, or reminders.

例: I remember important things by making lists and setting phone reminders. For example, if I have to pay a bill I put a reminder on my calendar and tick it off once completed, and my parents also encourage me to stay focused on my goals.

× Yes I could at memorizing them because I am a student academic which which make me learning more things easily from the study because I regularly do studying no gap in my study.

✓ Yes, I am good at memorizing things because I am a student and I study regularly, so I learn new things easily.

Student misused pronouns and relative clauses and had awkward wording. Replace 'I could at memorizing them' with 'I am good at memorizing things' for correct idiom. Change 'I am a student academic which which make me learning' to 'I am a student and I study regularly' to fix pronoun/reference and verb forms. Remove redundant phrases and use simple present tense for habitual actions. ID:12

× Yes I forgotten my other card document on last week when I go to make my passport.

✓ Yes, I forgot my other document last week when I went to apply for my passport.

Incorrect past tense forms were used. Use the simple past 'forgot' instead of 'forgotten' and 'went' instead of 'go' for completed past actions. Also 'on last week' is wrong preposition and article, change to 'last week'. Use 'apply for' or 'make' depending on variety; 'apply for my passport' is natural. ID:5

× They rejected my passport by don't taking Aadhaar card.

✓ They rejected my application because I didn't bring my Aadhaar card.

Ungrammatical clause 'by don't taking' mixes structures. Use 'because' to give reason and the negative past 'didn't bring' for the action the speaker failed to do. Also 'rejected my passport' is odd; 'rejected my application' or 'refused to process my passport' is clearer. ID:16

× I need to remember my calories going because our fitness is first important in our life.

✓ I need to keep track of my calorie intake because fitness is very important in life.

'My calories going' is incorrect phrasing; use 'keep track of my calorie intake.' 'Our fitness is first important in our life' is ungrammatical—use 'fitness is very important in life.' Also prefer general subject 'life' rather than redundant 'our life.' ID:12

× We must have to look at our body because that's really needed.

✓ We must take care of our bodies because that is really necessary.

'Must have to' is redundant; use 'must' or 'have to.' 'Look at our body' is unclear; 'take care of our bodies' conveys meaning. 'That's really needed' is awkward—use 'that is really necessary.' ID:12

× I am, I remember, more interesting.

✓ I remember things more easily when they are interesting to me.

Original sentence fragments are incoherent. Reconstruct to express intended meaning: use comparative 'more easily' and conditional 'when they are interesting.' Ensure subject-verb-object order. ID:26

× My parents told him every day to achieve that goal which I want to achieve.

✓ My parents told me every day to work toward the goal I want to achieve.

Incorrect pronoun 'him' should be 'me' to refer to the speaker. 'Told me every day to achieve that goal' is awkward—use 'told me every day to work toward the goal I want to achieve.' Avoid redundant 'that goal which.' ID:12

× They always motivated me to look at my inner soul.

✓ They always motivate me to look inside myself.

Tense consistency: use present 'motivate' for habitual action. 'Look at my inner soul' is unnatural in English; 'look inside myself' or 'reflect on myself' is more natural. Also 'inner soul' is redundant. ID:12