Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence and correct verb forms (e.g., “I rely on” instead of “I would like on”). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Not really. I’m getting worse at memorising things, so I rely on digital apps like Google Calendar and Todoist to keep track of important events and deadlines. For example, I add events as soon as they are scheduled and set reminders so I don’t forget.

提案: Provide a clearer sequence and more specific detail; combine short sentences to sound more natural. Use linking words (e.g., “then,” “so”) and correct minor grammar (e.g., “in the middle of the night”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I have. Once I forgot an important work task and woke up in the middle of the night worrying about it, so the next morning I set a reminder on my phone and completed it first thing. Since then I always add deadlines to my calendar to avoid the same problem.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and finish your thought. Be specific about the types of items you remember and use linking words to separate home and work. Avoid filler words (e.g., “uh”). Keep it to 2–3 complete sentences.

例: I need to remember both family and work commitments. At home I track my children’s school events, interviews and concerts, and at work I keep deadlines and meetings in my calendar so I don’t miss them.

提案: Be grammatically precise and slightly more detailed. Start with a clear topic sentence describing your main method, then add specifics about timing and examples. Use correct phrasing (e.g., “set reminders one day and one hour before”). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I mainly use digital apps to remember important things. I add appointments and birthdays to my calendar and set reminders one day before and one hour before, which helps me prepare and avoid missing anything.

× No, I am not very good at memorizing things as I am getting older these days I would like on digital apps such as Google Calendar and To Do List to keep track job important events and dates.

✓ No, I am not very good at memorizing things, and as I am getting older these days I like to use digital apps such as Google Calendar and To Do List to keep track of important events and dates.

Run-on sentence and word order problems: The original sentence combines clauses without proper connectors or punctuation and contains incorrect word order ('would like on digital apps', 'keep track job important events'). Suggestion: split clauses with a comma and conjunction ('and'), use the correct verb phrase 'like to use', and place 'of' after 'keep track' and order adjectives/nouns as 'important events and dates'. Use consistent tense and modal meaning ('would like' implies wish; 'like to use' fits habitual action).

× Yes I have. Once I forgot to complete an important work task.

✓ Yes, I have. Once I forgot to complete an important work task.

Punctuation and clarity: The sentence is grammatically acceptable for past tense but needs a comma after 'Yes' for natural written English. The past simple 'forgot' is correct for a completed past action. Suggest adding the comma for clarity and flow.

× I woke up in the middle of night and worried.

✓ I woke up in the middle of the night and worried.

Missing article: 'middle of night' requires the definite article 'the' -> 'middle of the night'. Suggestion: Insert 'the' to form the correct noun phrase. The tense and verb choice 'woke up' and 'worried' are appropriate.

× I set a reminder on my cell phone to remind me to complete it the first thing next day.

✓ I set a reminder on my cell phone to remind me to complete it first thing the next day.

Word order and article: 'the first thing next day' is incorrect. Use the adverbial phrase 'first thing the next day'. No -ing error here but the structure of time expression is wrong. Suggest placing 'first thing' before 'the next day' and include 'the'.

× I have a lot of things to remember in my daily life.

✓ I have a lot of things to remember in my daily life.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense description of habitual responsibilities. No change necessary.

× At home I have to remember my children's important events such as, uh, interview and concerts.

✓ At home I have to remember my children's important events such as interviews and concerts.

Countable nouns and article use: 'interview' should be plural 'interviews' to match 'events' and parallel 'concerts'. Remove filler 'uh' in written form. Suggest making both items plural for parallelism and clarity.

× At work, I have to.

✓ At work, I have other things I have to remember.

Fragment: 'At work, I have to.' is incomplete because it lacks the object or verb complement. Suggest completing the sentence with what must be remembered, e.g. 'other things I have to remember' to be grammatical and clear.

× I use digital apps on my to help me remember important things such as appointments, birthdays.

✓ I use digital apps on my phone to help me remember important things such as appointments and birthdays.

Missing word and punctuation: 'on my' is incomplete; it should be 'on my phone'. Also use 'and' between listed items, not a trailing comma. Suggest inserting 'phone' and adding 'and' for correct coordination.

× I usually set up set a reminder one day before and an hour before so I don't miss.

✓ I usually set a reminder one day before and an hour before so I don't miss them.

Redundancy and missing object: 'set up set' duplicates verbs; remove 'set up' or 'set'. Also 'so I don't miss' is incomplete—missing object 'them' referring to appointments/events. Suggest: 'I usually set a reminder one day before and an hour before so I don't miss them.'