Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you are good at memorising, then give one or two specific methods you use. Avoid fillers, repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' correctly. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things because I always take notes. For example, I write short reminders in a notebook after class and review them every night, so the information stays fresh.

提案: Answer with a clear yes/no and then give one specific example with details (when, what happened, result). Avoid hesitation and repetition. Use past tense correctly and connect sentences with words like 'for example' and 'because'. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I have. Once when I was working at a café last year, I forgot the daily menu for a short time. Because I hadn't reviewed the specials that morning, I had to ask a colleague for help, which delayed service for a few minutes.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence describing the main things you must remember daily, then add one specific method you use and why it helps. Avoid unclear words and fillers; use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'memory' not 'malady'). Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: I need to remember appointments, work tasks and shopping items every day. To manage this, I write everything in a small notebook and check it each morning so I don't forget important tasks.

提案: Start with a clear statement of the main techniques you use, then give one or two specific practices and explain briefly why they work. Use linking words such as 'for example' and 'because' and avoid fillers and grammar errors. Keep to 3–4 coherent sentences.

例: I use several methods to remember important things, mainly taking notes and reviewing them each night. For example, I write down tasks and then discuss them with a friend or coworker to test my memory, because explaining information helps me retain it better.

× Oh yeah, I am good at memorizing and everything, 'cause I, I take a note all times and I, I try to leave you every night.

✓ Oh yeah, I'm good at memorizing and everything, 'cause I take notes all the time and I try to review them every night.

Errors: 'take a note all times' has article and singular/plural issues and awkward structure; should be 'take notes all the time' (plural and fixed expression). 'leave you every night' is unclear/sentence structure error; likely meant 'review them every night'. Suggestion: use contractions appropriately, pluralize 'notes', use 'all the time' for frequency, and replace unclear phrase with the correct verb 'review' and object 'them'.

× Uh, I, I'm good at memorizing in general, but uh, sometimes I forgot something important.

✓ Uh, I'm good at memorizing in general, but sometimes I forget something important.

Error: 'forgot' is past tense but speaker refers to a habitual or occasional present situation; use simple present 'forget'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual occurrences (sometimes I forget).

× For example, I forgot my, I, I work at cafe and I forgot, uh, the menu.

✓ For example, I work at a cafe and sometimes I forget the menu.

Errors: word order and article 'a' missing before 'cafe'; redundant repetition and tense inconsistency. Suggestion: put the workplace clause first ('I work at a cafe') and then state the problem ('I forget the menu'). Use 'sometimes' for frequency and include article 'a'.

× How, how to make menu something sometimes.

✓ Sometimes I don't remember how to make items on the menu.

Errors: fragmented sentence and incorrect word order. 'How to make menu something' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: express as a full clause with subject and verb: 'I don't remember how to make items on the menu' or 'how to make some menu items'.

× Uh, in my case, I have to, I have to write something to not uh, because uh, it is difficult to uh memorize M malady using without uh notebook.

✓ In my case, I have to write things down because it is difficult to memorize many details without a notebook.

Errors: awkward phrasing 'write something to not', missing article before 'notebook', unclear phrase 'M malady' likely 'many details', and incorrect preposition 'using without'. Suggestion: use the verb phrase 'write things down', 'because' to join clauses, 'many details' for plural idea, and include the article 'a notebook'.

× I have a lot of way to memorizing such as take a note and review all every night and uh, it just, uh, it is good way to review, uh, the talk to talk to other people and checking my memorizing.

✓ I have a lot of ways to memorize, such as taking notes and reviewing them every night. It is also a good idea to talk to other people and check my memory.

Errors: 'a lot of way' should be 'a lot of ways' (singular/plural), 'to memorizing' should be 'to memorize' or use gerund 'ways of memorizing', 'take a note' should be 'taking notes', 'review all every night' should be 'reviewing them every night', and final clause 'the talk to talk to other people and checking my memorizing' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: restructure into two sentences, use parallel gerunds ('taking', 'reviewing'), use correct plural and articles, and use 'check my memory' for clarity.