Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅自然。建议减少重复，使用更准确的词汇，并且结构清晰。可以先直接回答问题，然后举例说明。

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget where I put my keys or phone, and I sometimes struggle to remember people's names and faces.

提案: 回答中有大量重复和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复，并且提供具体的例子。

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I once missed a project deadline at work, and when I was a child, I missed an important dance performance.

提案: 回答不完整且重复，缺乏连贯性。建议直接回答问题，结构清晰，并提供具体细节。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember the knowledge I learn at school because I am a student, and it's important for my studies and exams.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但有轻微重复。建议避免重复，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I usually remember important things by writing them down on my phone. For example, if I have an important dance class, I mark it on my phone's calendar so I don't forget.

× I open.

✓ I often forget.

这里的“I open”没有意义，应该是“I often forget”，表示“我经常忘记”，符合语境。

× where where I put my teeth and phones.

✓ where I put my keys and phone.

“teeth”是“牙齿”，显然不符合语境，应为“keys”（钥匙）和“phone”（手机），且“phones”复数不合适。

× such as missing missing a deadlines for for project work

✓ such as missing deadlines for project work

“a deadlines”中“a”是单数冠词，和复数“deadlines”冲突，应去掉“a”且去掉重复。

× and why was a child I I miss I miss the important dance dance.

✓ and when I was a child, I missed an important dance.

“why”应为“when”，“I miss”应为过去式“missed”，且“dance dance”重复，应去掉重复。

× And on this letter, I believe that I need to remember, remember my knowledge in my daily life because I'm a, because I'm a, I'm a student.

✓ And on this matter, I believe that I need to remember my knowledge in my daily life because I'm a student.

“on this letter”不合适，应为“on this matter”；重复“because I'm a”应去掉多余部分，句子结构更通顺。

× So I think the knowledge.

✓ So I think knowledge is important.

“the knowledge”用法不当，知识一般不用定冠词，且句子不完整，应补充谓语使句子完整。

× I usually remember important things by writing them down in my phone.

✓ I usually remember important things by writing them down on my phone.

“write down on”是固定搭配，表示在某物上写东西，不能用“in”。

× if I have an important dance class, I will I will mark it on my phone and the calendar.

✓ if I have an important dance class, I will mark it on my phone and calendar.

“the calendar”前不需要定冠词，且“I will”重复，应去掉重复。