Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and provides an example, but it contains some hesitation sounds like 'uh uh' and could be more concise. Try to avoid filler words and make your sentences clearer and more direct. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I consider myself good at memorising things. For instance, when I prepare accounts or balance sheets, I can quickly and efficiently remember numerical values, which helps me analyse data effectively.

提案: Your answer is clear and provides a specific example with a result and solution, which is good. However, you can improve coherence by using linking words like 'however' or 'therefore' and avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'fumble' instead of 'fumbled'.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, I once prepared a school project and presentation, but on the day of presenting, I forgot what to say and fumbled. Therefore, I started using planners to stay organised.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitation and some repetition. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect your points and make your answer more fluent.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember whether I have packed my bag and studied the required subjects. Additionally, I must ensure that I have cooked enough food and switched off electronic appliances before leaving.

提案: Your answer explains your method well but has some hesitation and slightly awkward phrasing. Avoid filler words and try to make your sentences more concise and clear. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: To remember important things, I usually write them down in a small planner, which I organise into personal, academic, and job folders. This way, I can easily keep track of important deadlines and tasks.

× This has always been useful when I am uh uh, analyzing.

✓ This has always been useful when I am, uh, analyzing.

The sentence contains repeated filler words 'uh uh' which is not grammatically correct. Removing the repetition improves clarity and maintains the correct use of the present continuous tense 'am analyzing'.

× But on the day of presenting, I forgot what I was supposed to say and fumble.

✓ But on the day of presenting, I forgot what I was supposed to say and fumbled.

The verb 'fumble' should be in the past tense 'fumbled' to agree with the past tense context established by 'forgot'. This maintains tense consistency in the sentence.

× I usually note them down in a small planner, uh, in that I have segregated it to according to the personal, academic or, uh, job folders.

✓ I usually note them down in a small planner, uh, in which I have segregated it according to the personal, academic, or, uh, job folders.

The phrase 'segregated it to according to' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'according to' without 'to' before it. Also, 'in that' is better replaced with 'in which' to refer to the planner. This correction improves prepositional accuracy and sentence clarity.