Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể với liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, if my mom asks me to close the door and then do something else, I often forget the next task after closing the door.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết hoặc lặp lại. Hãy sử dụng thì đúng và câu hoàn chỉnh. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, I often forget important things, such as my keys, especially when I am in a hurry to go out.

提案: Câu trả lời cần được cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Hãy chú ý ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Tránh lặp từ và nói ngắn gọn, tự nhiên.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to turn off all electrical devices when I leave the house because it helps save money and reduce electricity costs.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh sử dụng từ ngữ thừa và tiếng lắp. Sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn sử dụng ứng dụng để ghi nhớ.

例: I remember important things by using an app on my phone called Notion. I write notes there and mark tasks as completed by clicking the check button when I finish them.

× Let's for example if my mom tell me to close the door I need to do and do something, I will close the door and forget the next thing I need to do.

✓ Let's say, for example, if my mom tells me to close the door and do something, I will close the door and forget the next thing I need to do.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Let's for example if' which is not a proper conjunction or phrase. It should be 'Let's say, for example,' to introduce an example clearly. Also, 'tell' should be 'tells' to agree with the singular subject 'mom'.

× Let's for example if my mom tell me to close the door I need to do and do something, I will close the door and forget the next thing I need to do.

✓ Let's say, for example, if my mom tells me to close the door and do something, I will close the door and forget the next thing I need to do.

The verb 'tell' should be in the third person singular form 'tells' to agree with the singular subject 'mom'.

× Yes, I have and is happen, uh, on a daily basis.

✓ Yes, I have and it happens, uh, on a daily basis.

The phrase 'is happen' is incorrect. The correct form is 'it happens' in present tense to indicate a habitual action. Also, 'have' should be followed by a past participle or be part of a complete sentence; here, 'I have' is incomplete but acceptable as a short answer. The correction clarifies the meaning and tense.

× My key. I often forgot it when I go out and I feels like.

✓ My key. I often forget it when I go out and I feel like.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense but the sentence describes a habitual action, so 'forget' in present tense is correct. Also, 'feels' should be 'feel' to agree with the subject 'I'.

× I think the thing I need to remember in her daily life that is I need to remember, uh, turn off all the electric device when I go out to I can save the money and reduce the cost of electricity.

✓ I think the thing I need to remember in my daily life is to turn off all the electrical devices when I go out so I can save money and reduce the cost of electricity.

The pronoun 'her' is incorrect because the speaker is talking about themselves, so 'my' is correct. Also, 'electric device' should be plural 'electrical devices'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I think the thing I need to remember in her daily life that is I need to remember, uh, turn off all the electric device when I go out to I can save the money and reduce the cost of electricity.

✓ I think the thing I need to remember in my daily life is to turn off all the electrical devices when I go out so I can save money and reduce the cost of electricity.

The phrase 'when I go out to I can save' is incorrect. It should be 'when I go out so I can save' to correctly express purpose.

× There are a lot of ways where I can remember important things.

✓ There are a lot of ways in which I can remember important things.

The preposition 'where' is incorrectly used to refer to ways. The correct phrase is 'ways in which' to indicate methods or manners.