Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткую структуру. Рекомендуется использовать более связные предложения, избегать повторов и уточнять мысли. Также стоит использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, when I was at school, I could easily retell what the teacher said. I believe this ability depends partly on genetics and partly on practice.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и повторов, а также грамматические ошибки. Следует говорить более уверенно, использовать связные предложения и конкретные детали.

例: Yes, I once forgot my wallet at home while I was studying at university. This was a big problem because I also left all my important documents, like my passport and ID cards, in my dormitory.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит много пауз. Рекомендуется структурировать ответ, использовать полные предложения и конкретные примеры, а также связующие слова.

例: During my maternity leave, I need to remember many things related to childcare. For instance, I keep track of when to change nappies and read stories to my child every day.

提案: Ответ короткий и содержит ошибки. Рекомендуется расширить ответ, использовать связующие слова и более точную лексику.

例: To remember important things, I try to focus carefully on them. Additionally, I write notes on my phone, which helps me keep track of different tasks.

× Yes, as far as I can remember in my childhood, I remember everything.

✓ Yes, as far as I can remember from my childhood, I remembered everything.

The sentence mixes present tense 'can remember' with 'remember' referring to past events. Since the context is about childhood (past), 'remembered' should be used to maintain tense consistency.

× Actually at school I retell everything. What our teacher said.

✓ Actually, at school, I retold everything that our teacher said.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper connection. 'Retell' should be in past tense 'retold' to match the past context, and the two sentences should be combined for clarity.

× I think it depends on our genetic and our my.

✓ I think it depends on our genetics and my own abilities.

The phrase 'our genetic and our my' is incorrect. 'Genetics' is the correct noun, and 'my own abilities' clarifies the personal aspect. Pronouns should be consistent and clear.

× Yes uh, when I uh, studied at university, I have forgotten my wallet at home, uh, when I uh, lived dormitory, so I stayed all of my passport, all of my documents such as passport ID cards.

✓ Yes, when I studied at university, I forgot my wallet at home. When I lived in the dormitory, I lost all of my documents such as my passport and ID cards.

The sentence incorrectly uses present perfect 'have forgotten' instead of simple past 'forgot' for a specific past event. Also, 'lived dormitory' lacks preposition 'in', and 'stayed all of my passport' is incorrect; 'lost' is appropriate here.

× Depending my maternity leave, all of things, uh, what I uh, must remember regarding, uh, with child care and child reading, such as, uh, what time I change, uh, nappies, umm, and uh.

✓ Depending on my maternity leave, I must remember many things regarding child care and child reading, such as what time I change nappies.

The phrase 'Depending my maternity leave' is missing the preposition 'on'. Also, 'all of things' should be 'many things' or 'all the things'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I tried to get focus for that essential things.

✓ I try to focus on those essential things.

The original sentence uses past tense 'tried' but the context suggests a habitual action, so present tense 'try' is more appropriate. Also, 'get focus for' is incorrect; 'focus on' is the correct phrase.

× Also I tried to write all of different things on my phone to remember.

✓ Also, I try to write down different things on my phone to remember.

'All of different things' is incorrect; 'different things' suffices. Also, 'tried' is past tense but the context suggests habitual action, so 'try' is better. Added 'write down' for clarity.