Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và thiếu sự rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp thêm chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng cách sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết và lỗi ngữ pháp như 'my life have'.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things because I often have many problems to solve, which makes me forget some information easily.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và rõ ràng, đồng thời cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I used to think I would never forget my toy car, which my mother gave me when I was four years old, but now I realize I have misplaced it.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn và câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên.

例: I need to remember my daily schedule because, as a student, I have to attend classes on time and also study extra courses besides my regular school lessons.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cố gắng nói tự nhiên và rõ ràng hơn, đồng thời sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

例: I usually write important things on my mobile phone and set daily reminders. This way, I never forget deadlines and can complete my tasks on time.

× I'm not sure about my memories because I think that my life have a lot of problems and issues that I have to address and I have to think, uh, numerous information, so I think that I can easily forget.

✓ I'm not sure about my memories because I think that my life has a lot of problems and issues that I have to address and I have to think about numerous pieces of information, so I think that I can easily forget.

The subject 'my life' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' (subject-verb agreement). Also, 'information' is an uncountable noun, so 'numerous information' is incorrect; it should be 'numerous pieces of information' to correctly quantify it.

× Absolutely yes, for example, when I was a child I think that I will never for I would never forget my car toys because it very important for me.

✓ Absolutely yes, for example, when I was a child I thought that I would never forget my car toys because they were very important to me.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so the verbs should be in the past tense: 'think' changes to 'thought', 'will never' to 'would never', and 'it very important' needs correction to 'they were very important' to match plural 'car toys' and past tense.

× Seemed my mother gift me as a gift when I was about four years old, but now when I have to do it properly.

✓ It seemed my mother gave me the gift when I was about four years old, but now I have to do it properly.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Seemed' needs a subject and verb; 'gift me as a gift' is incorrect usage. Corrected to 'It seemed my mother gave me the gift'. Also, 'but now when I have to do it properly' is incomplete and unclear; simplified to 'but now I have to do it properly'.

× because it very important for me.

✓ because it is very important to me.

Missing verb 'is' after 'it' and preposition 'to' is correct with 'important'. This corrects the sentence structure and preposition usage.

× I think that I have to remember my schedule, you know, I'm a student and I have to remember my schedule to go to class on time.

✓ I think that I have to remember my schedule; you know, I'm a student and I have to remember my schedule to attend class on time.

The phrase 'go to class' is acceptable but 'attend class' is more formal and appropriate in this context. Also, a semicolon improves sentence clarity.

× I have to study a lot of, uh, extra classes in addition to my compulsory school.

✓ I have to take a lot of extra classes in addition to my compulsory school classes.

We 'take' classes rather than 'study classes'. Also, 'compulsory school' is vague; adding 'classes' clarifies meaning.

× I often note some important things in my mobile phone so I can uh, set an set a reminder daily and you know, it will remind me whenever I forget and I can, uh, do my deadline on time, for example.

✓ I often note some important things in my mobile phone so I can set a daily reminder, and you know, it will remind me whenever I forget, so I can meet my deadlines on time, for example.

Corrected 'set an set a reminder daily' to 'set a daily reminder' for clarity and grammar. 'Do my deadline' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'meet my deadlines'. Added commas and conjunctions for better sentence flow.