Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide a specific example with linking words to make your response coherent.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorizing things. For example, my colleagues often ask me to recall details about objects they showed me, and I usually remember them accurately, which surprises them.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some errors. Try to speak more fluently and organize your thoughts logically. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words. Also, correct grammar mistakes and be specific about the event.

例: Actually, I have forgotten something important once. When I was 11, I forgot my father's birthday because I was focusing on my upcoming exams, and I felt very guilty about it.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and structured. Avoid filler words and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about the tools you use and why they help you.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember many tasks because I am a full-time worker. Therefore, I use reminders on my phone and write lists on a calendar to keep track of what I need to do and buy.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words. Also, try to avoid repetition and make your sentences more concise and natural.

例: To remember important things, I usually set reminders on my mobile phone. For instance, I have an interview at Tim Horton tomorrow, so my phone alerts me every hour to ensure I don't forget.

× Mia, I'm very good with memorizing things.

✓ Mia, I'm very good at memorizing things.

The correct preposition to use with 'good' when referring to an ability is 'at', not 'with'. Therefore, 'good with memorizing' should be 'good at memorizing'.

× Like my colleagues always told me to remember everything and whenever they ask me that detail of that object which they saw me, I always tell them correctly and they are very amazed at me whenever I remember.

✓ Like my colleagues always tell me to remember everything, and whenever they ask me for details about an object they saw me with, I always tell them correctly, and they are very amazed at me whenever I remember.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and plural/singular issues. 'Colleagues always told' should be 'colleagues always tell' to match present tense. 'That detail of that object' is awkward; 'details about an object' is clearer. 'Which they saw me' is incomplete; 'they saw me with' clarifies the meaning. Also, commas improve sentence clarity.

× Uh, no, it does not happen with the mayor, but I remember when I was 11 I forgot my uh, father birthday birthday due to my exam I was near and I was just focusing on my uh exams and that time I forgot my father's birthday.

✓ Uh, no, it does not happen to me, but I remember when I was 11 I forgot my father's birthday because my exams were near and I was just focusing on my exams, so at that time I forgot my father's birthday.

'It does not happen with the mayor' is incorrect and unclear; likely meant 'it does not happen to me'. 'Father birthday birthday' is a repetition and missing possessive; should be 'my father's birthday'. 'Due to my exam I was near' is incorrect; 'because my exams were near' is correct. The sentence is long and needs commas for clarity.

× Uh, in today life I'm very busy because I'm a full time worker so I need to uh, make a reminder on my umm, clock or a calendar to remember everything.

✓ Uh, in today's life I'm very busy because I'm a full-time worker, so I need to make a reminder on my clock or calendar to remember everything.

'In today life' should be 'in today's life' to show possession. 'Full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as an adjective. 'Make a reminder on my clock or a calendar' is acceptable but 'on my clock or calendar' is more natural without 'a' before calendar.

× Whenever I go out I always write what I need to do and what I need to purchase or sell.

✓ Whenever I go out, I always write down what I need to do and what I need to purchase or sell.

The verb 'write' is usually followed by the particle 'down' when referring to making notes or lists. Adding a comma after 'go out' improves readability.

× So to remember things I set a reminder on my mobile so it keep track of everything.

✓ So to remember things, I set a reminder on my mobile so it keeps track of everything.

The verb 'keep' should be in third person singular form 'keeps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, a comma after the introductory phrase improves clarity.

× Like tomorrow I have an interview at Tim Horton so it was reminding me again and again after every hour.

✓ Like tomorrow I have an interview at Tim Hortons, so it reminds me again and again every hour.

The phrase 'it was reminding me' is past continuous, but the event is in the future ('tomorrow I have an interview'), so present tense 'it reminds me' is appropriate. Also, 'Tim Horton' should be 'Tim Hortons' (correct name). 'After every hour' is better as 'every hour'. Comma added before 'so'.

× So I did not forget that thing.

✓ So I did not forget that.

The phrase 'that thing' is redundant; 'that' suffices. The past tense 'did not forget' is correct here as the event is in the past.