Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“makes me more stronger”应为“makes me stronger”。回答较为冗长且重复，缺少连贯的连接词，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, I can clearly remember my happy childhood memories from kindergarten, which have made me stronger as a person.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“was makes me a really big problem”应为“it caused a big problem”。表达不够连贯，缺少连接词，且细节描述不够具体。建议注意时态一致，使用连接词，并详细说明忘记SIM卡带来的具体影响。

例: Yes, recently I forgot to bring my SIM card when I traveled abroad from China. This caused a big problem because I couldn't access the Internet, which made it difficult to communicate and find information.

提案: 回答表达较为清晰，但存在语法错误，如“you makes”应为“you make”，且句子结构略显混乱。建议使用更准确的语法，简化句子，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my classes and appointments with friends. If I forget them, it could harm my relationships, so I always write them down in my calendar.

提案: 回答内容具体且相关，但存在语法和表达不自然的问题，如“what will happen”应为“what happened”，以及“this makes me a very good memory”应为“this creates very good memories”。建议注意时态和表达准确性，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Personally, I like to take photos because they help me remember where I have been and what happened. For example, last summer, my mother and I went to Japan and took many photos, which created wonderful memories for me.

× So I have quite a lot of, umm, happy, cheerful memory in my childhood.

✓ So I have quite a lot of, umm, happy, cheerful memories in my childhood.

memory是不可数名词时表示记忆力，但这里指的是多条记忆，应使用复数形式memories。

× So it makes me more stronger and.

✓ So it makes me stronger.

more stronger是重复比较级，stronger本身就是比较级，不需要more。

× I just forgot to bring this card to abroad when I just leaving my hometown China.

✓ I just forgot to bring this card abroad when I was leaving my hometown China.

to abroad用法错误，正确表达是bring this card abroad；另外，leaving应使用过去进行时was leaving以符合时间背景。

× It was makes me a really big problem because I can't use the Internet.

✓ It caused me a really big problem because I couldn't use the Internet.

was makes结构错误，时态不一致，应使用过去时caused；can't用过去时couldn't以符合过去时间。

× If you are just forgot, this makes a big problem that it can cause you, you are with your friends relationship damaged.

✓ If you just forget, this causes a big problem that can damage your relationship with your friends.

are just forgot时态和结构错误，应使用一般现在时forget；you are with your friends relationship damaged表达不通顺，改为damage your relationship with your friends更自然。

× So those things you need to write them in the calendar.

✓ So you need to write those things in the calendar.

you need to write them和those things重复，去掉them使句子更简洁自然。

× Uh, those photos can help me to memorize the things where we go, what will happen.

✓ Uh, those photos can help me memorize the things we did and what happened.

help后面一般直接接动词原形，不用to memorize；where we go和what will happen时态不符，改为过去时更合适。

× For example, I have a trip with my mother, uh, last summer we went to Japan and we took a lot of photos and this makes me a very good memory.

✓ For example, I took a trip with my mother last summer. We went to Japan and took a lot of photos, and this gives me very good memories.

have a trip时态不对，改为过去时took a trip；this makes me a very good memory表达不自然，改为this gives me very good memories更合适。