Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but a bit repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid redundancy like repeating 'I know' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Also, provide clearer examples with more specific details.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For instance, during high school, I used to memorise long Urdu passages by focusing on key words, which helped me recall the content easily. Additionally, I remember advice from my parents and friends because I pay close attention to their words. This ability helps me in both studies and daily life.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Use correct verb tenses and avoid fragmented sentences. Also, organise your answer logically using linking words like 'however' or 'sometimes'. Provide specific examples to support your points.

例: I have never forgotten anything very important. However, sometimes when I leave home for the office or market, I forget small things like my wallet or keys. These minor forgetfulness moments happen occasionally, but I try to be more careful to avoid them.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with relevant details. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important tasks such as offering the five daily prayers, which is essential in my faith as a Muslim. Besides religious duties, I also try to remember my work responsibilities and personal commitments to stay organised and productive.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and incomplete. Use clear and complete sentences to explain your methods of remembering important things. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Avoid repetition and improve grammar.

例: I remember important things by actively memorising them and sometimes by writing notes. For example, I memorise advice given by others and passages from school literature by repeating them several times. This practice helps me retain information effectively.

× I never forgotten something important.

✓ I have never forgotten something important.

The sentence uses 'never forgotten' without an auxiliary verb, which is incorrect. The present perfect tense requires 'have' or 'has' before the past participle. Correct form is 'I have never forgotten'. This shows an action that has relevance to the present.

× Sometime it's more often like I used to forgot my wallet or my keys.

✓ Sometimes, more often, I forget my wallet or my keys.

The phrase 'used to forgot' is incorrect because 'forgot' is the past tense, and 'used to' should be followed by the base form 'forget'. Also, 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. The corrected sentence uses present tense 'forget' to indicate habitual action.

× there was long passages in Urdu

✓ there were long passages in Urdu

The subject 'passages' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving singular and plural forms.

× whenever I leave my home to the office or to the market.

✓ whenever I leave my home for the office or the market.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used after 'leave my home'. The correct preposition is 'for' when indicating destination after 'leave'.

× we need to remember in my our daily life

✓ we need to remember in our daily life

The phrase 'my our' is incorrect as it combines two possessive pronouns. Only one possessive pronoun should be used. 'Our' is appropriate here as it refers to a collective group including the speaker.

× we offer five time prayers

✓ we offer five times prayers

The phrase 'five time prayers' is incorrect. The correct form is 'five times prayers' or better 'five daily prayers'. 'Times' is the correct plural form when indicating frequency.

× we as a human are more capable and more. Doing job for Islam.

✓ We as humans are more capable and do more work for Islam.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect structure. 'More.' is incomplete and 'Doing job' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb agreement and completes the thought clearly.

× I memorized things to be note down in my memory.

✓ I memorized things to be noted down in my memory.

The phrase 'to be note down' is incorrect. The correct passive infinitive form is 'to be noted down'. This is a verb form issue involving the past participle.