Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide a brief explanation. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorizing things because I find it difficult to retain information without writing it down or practicing repeatedly.

提案: Your response is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Provide a clear and concise answer with specific examples or reasons, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before, which is a bad habit. However, I try to avoid this by making lists and setting reminders because forgetting important tasks can cause problems.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Clearly state what you need to remember and explain why, using proper sentence structure and linking words.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to use my phone to keep track of appointments and tasks because it helps me stay organized and manage my time effectively.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Provide a clear topic sentence, use linking words, and give specific details about your method of remembering important things.

例: I remember important things by using my phone to take notes and set reminders. This method is very useful for me because I can check my phone anytime to stay organized.

× No, I'm not good at memorizing things. That is a bad habit for me and I always try to memorize it but I cannot try it.

✓ No, I'm not good at memorizing things. That is a bad habit for me and I always try to memorize them but I cannot.

The phrase 'try to memorize it' is incorrect because 'things' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them'. Also, 'cannot try it' is awkward and redundant; 'cannot' alone suffices. The verb 'try' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not 'try it' again.

× Yes, I always forget something important, that is my bad habit, I know. But also I always try to don't forget my important something because this is crucial thing that's forgetting is not fair.

✓ Yes, I always forget something important, that is my bad habit, I know. But I also always try not to forget important things because this is crucial and forgetting is not fair.

The phrase 'try to don't forget' is incorrect; the correct form is 'try not to forget'. Also, 'my important something' is awkward; 'important things' is more natural. The sentence structure was confusing and needed rephrasing for clarity.

× In my daily life I need to remember use my phone that has always helped me to doing something well.

✓ In my daily life, I need to remember to use my phone, which has always helped me do things well.

The phrase 'remember use my phone' is missing 'to' after 'remember'. Also, 'helped me to doing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'helped me do'. The relative pronoun 'that' is better replaced with 'which' for non-restrictive clauses.

× In my daily life I remember important things by using my phone that is love me. I'm always trying to note in my phone the important things and in my daily life it is useful for me and I use it everyday.

✓ In my daily life, I remember important things by using my phone that I love. I'm always trying to note important things in my phone, and it is useful for me every day.

The phrase 'phone that is love me' is incorrect; it should be 'phone that I love'. Also, 'trying to note in my phone the important things' is awkward; the correct order is 'note important things in my phone'. 'Everyday' should be two words 'every day' when used as an adverb.