Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'like an example' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For instance, I can easily remember people's faces and names, which is very useful during social or work events.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, two days ago, I forgot my best friend's birthday because I was overloaded with work and personal responsibilities.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct word usage. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, use appropriate vocabulary related to health and routine.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to have lunch and dinner at proper times. Maintaining a healthy eating schedule is important, especially when I am very busy, to keep my energy levels up.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain your methods logically. Try to be concise and natural in your response.

例: Usually, I remember important things mentally. However, when I am overworked, I make a list either in my notepad or on my mobile phone to ensure I don't forget anything.

× Like an example, I easily remember people face and their name and this is usually useful especially when we are attending a social events or the work events.

✓ For example, I easily remember people's faces and their names, and this is usually useful especially when we are attending social events or work events.

The phrase 'Like an example' is incorrect; 'For example' is the correct expression. 'People face' should be 'people's faces' to show possession and plural form. 'Their name' should be 'their names' to agree with plural 'people'. 'A social events' and 'the work events' are incorrect; 'social events' and 'work events' without articles are appropriate here.

× Like an example, I easily remember people face and their name and this is usually useful especially when we are attending a social events or the work events.

✓ For example, I easily remember people's faces and their names, and this is usually useful especially when we are attending social events or work events.

The noun 'face' should be plural 'faces' to match 'people'. Similarly, 'name' should be plural 'names' to correspond with 'people'. Also, 'a social events' is incorrect because 'events' is plural and should not have 'a' before it.

× Like an example uh, two days before I just forgot my best friend's birthday due to the overloaded with my work and personal lives.

✓ For example, two days ago I forgot my best friend's birthday due to being overloaded with my work and personal life.

'Like an example uh, two days before' is incorrect; 'For example, two days ago' is the correct expression. 'Due to the overloaded with' is incorrect; it should be 'due to being overloaded with'. 'Personal lives' should be 'personal life' as it refers to the speaker's own life.

× So when I'm over when with my personal matters or the responsibilities, I forgot sometimes some things.

✓ So when I'm overwhelmed with my personal matters or responsibilities, I sometimes forget some things.

The phrase 'over when with' is incorrect; it should be 'overwhelmed with'. 'The responsibilities' should be 'responsibilities' without 'the' as it is general. 'I forgot sometimes some things' should be 'I sometimes forget some things' to maintain present tense and correct adverb placement.

× I need to remember in my daily life to take a lunch and dinner and a prop on a proper time.

✓ I need to remember in my daily life to have lunch and dinner at the proper time.

'Take a lunch and dinner' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'have lunch and dinner'. 'A prop on a proper time' is incorrect; it should be 'at the proper time'.

× I mean the maintaining the proper eating and the proper time, that is very important for our healthy lifestyle, especially when I'm very well loaded.

✓ I mean maintaining proper eating habits at the proper time; that is very important for a healthy lifestyle, especially when I'm very busy.

'The maintaining the proper eating' is incorrect; it should be 'maintaining proper eating habits'. 'The proper time' needs the preposition 'at'. 'Our healthy lifestyle' should be 'a healthy lifestyle' as it is general. 'Very well loaded' is incorrect; 'very busy' is appropriate.

× So I need energy and healthy.

✓ So I need energy and to be healthy.

'Healthy' is an adjective and cannot stand alone here; it needs to be part of a phrase like 'to be healthy'.

× Usually I remember important things in my mind.

✓ Usually I remember important things in my mind.

This sentence is acceptable; no correction needed.

× I have in my mind all the important things.

✓ I have all the important things in my mind.

The sentence is grammatically correct but the word order is more natural as 'I have all the important things in my mind'.

× But sometimes when I'm overworked, loaded and the uh in occupied in some things, which is not remembered by my mind.

✓ But sometimes when I'm overworked, overloaded, and occupied with some things, which are not remembered by my mind.

'In occupied in' is incorrect; it should be 'occupied with'. 'Loaded' should be 'overloaded' to match meaning. 'Which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'things'.

× So I will take, I will make a list in my notepad or uh, if notepad is not there, I will make a list in my mobile phone.

✓ So I will make a list in my notepad, or if the notepad is not available, I will make a list on my mobile phone.

The phrase 'So I will take, I will make a list' is awkward; 'So I will make a list' is sufficient. 'If notepad is not there' should be 'if the notepad is not available'. 'In my mobile phone' should be 'on my mobile phone'.