Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things, especially when they are meaningful to me. For instance, I always remember our family trips to the beach every summer because they are special moments. These memories help me recall details easily.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant information. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid unrelated details.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, sometimes when I go out with my friends, I forget my study plans or even my house keys. This happens because I get distracted by other activities.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Make sure to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and provide specific details. Use linking words to organise your ideas and avoid repetition or hesitation.

例: As a student, I need to remember my study schedule and important deadlines. Additionally, I keep track of my school timetable to manage my classes effectively.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. Start with a topic sentence, then explain your method of remembering important things with specific details and linking words.

例: I usually write important things in my phone because I tend to forget them. For example, I set reminders or alarms to help me remember appointments or tasks throughout the day.

× If I have a special memories, I can memorize it.

✓ If I have special memories, I can memorize them.

The noun 'memories' is plural, so the article 'a' should be removed and the pronoun 'it' should be changed to 'them' to agree in number with 'memories'.

× For example, my special memories I remember that every summer my family always go to travel the beach and just my relation.

✓ For example, my special memories are that every summer my family always goes to travel to the beach and just my relatives.

The verb 'go' should be 'goes' to agree with the singular subject 'my family' (third person singular). 'Relation' should be plural 'relatives' to correctly refer to family members. Also, 'travel the beach' should be 'travel to the beach' to use the correct preposition.

× my family always go to travel the beach

✓ my family always goes to travel to the beach

The subject 'my family' is singular, so the verb should be 'goes' instead of 'go' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× my family always go to travel the beach

✓ my family always goes to travel to the beach

The verb 'travel' requires the preposition 'to' before the destination, so 'travel the beach' should be 'travel to the beach'.

× just my relation

✓ just my relatives

'Relation' is incorrect here; the plural noun 'relatives' is appropriate when referring to family members.

× Yes, I often promise something important.

✓ Yes, I often forget something important.

The sentence context suggests the student means to say they often forget important things, not promise them. 'Promise' is incorrect here; 'forget' is the correct verb.

× For example, when I go out with my friends and we go shopping, it's very healthy.

✓ For example, when I go out with my friends and we go shopping, it is very enjoyable.

The phrase 'it's very healthy' is illogical in this context. The student likely meant to express that shopping with friends is enjoyable or fun. 'Healthy' is not appropriate here.

× So I forget my plan of my study or I forget a key in my home.

✓ So I forget my study plan or I forget my key at home.

'Plan of my study' is better expressed as 'study plan'. 'A key in my home' should be 'my key at home' for natural phrasing.

× Because I'm a I'm a student so I need to remember my plan of my study, my my. Template of my school.

✓ Because I'm a student, I need to remember my study plan and my school timetable.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Template of my school' is likely intended to be 'timetable of my school'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× Important things I always note in my phone because I've I'm easy to forget it.

✓ I always note important things in my phone because I am easy to forget them.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'I've I'm' is incorrect and should be 'I am'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural 'important things'.

× So when I'm not eat in my home, I eat my phone is my phone.

✓ So when I am not at home, my phone helps me remember.

'Not eat in my home' is incorrect; it should be 'not at home'. The phrase 'I eat my phone is my phone' is nonsensical and is corrected to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Can you call me and remind me to explain?

✓ Can you call me and remind me to explain?

This sentence is grammatically correct but contextually unclear. It may be better phrased as 'Can you call me and remind me?' if the student wants a reminder.