Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I am not very good at memorising things quickly. Since childhood, I have struggled to remember tasks, which often led to my teachers scolding me."

例: I am not very good at memorising things quickly. Since childhood, I have struggled to remember tasks, which often led to my teachers scolding me. Despite trying different methods, I still find it challenging to memorise information effectively.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain the situation logically. Be specific about the incident and its consequences. For example, "Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. Recently, I missed my passport appointment, which caused me to lose 12,000 rupees. Because of this, my parents scolded me, and now I try to memorise things more carefully."

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things several times. Recently, I missed my passport appointment, which caused me to lose 12,000 rupees. Because of this, my parents scolded me, and now I try to memorise things more carefully by setting reminders.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to organise your ideas. Be specific about what you need to remember daily. For example, "In my daily life, I need to remember tasks such as homework from my institution and responsibilities given by my parents. Additionally, I try to remember to read regularly."

例: In my daily life, I need to remember tasks such as homework from my institution and responsibilities given by my parents. Additionally, I try to remember to read regularly to improve my knowledge.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding unnecessary questions to the examiner. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "Although I am not good at memorising, I use my mobile phone to help me remember important things. There are many applications where I can set reminders by fixing the time, date, and task."

例: Although I am not good at memorising, I use my mobile phone to help me remember important things. There are many applications where I can set reminders by fixing the time, date, and task, which helps me stay organised.

× I am a short lost memory person and I am not able to memorizing things very quickly

✓ I am a person with a short memory and I am not able to memorize things very quickly

The verb 'memorizing' is incorrectly used after 'able to'. After 'able to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'short lost memory person' is awkward; 'person with a short memory' is clearer.

× I remember from my childhood I usually to scold by my teacher whenever I not remember to do my work

✓ I remember from my childhood I was usually scolded by my teacher whenever I did not remember to do my work

The sentence incorrectly uses 'to scold' and lacks proper past tense forms. 'Was scolded' is the correct past passive form, and 'did not remember' is the correct past tense negative form.

× Even I also tried to remember the things but I was not able to what I do

✓ Even I also tried to remember things but I was not able to do what I needed to

The phrase 'was not able to what I do' is incorrect; after 'able to' the base verb 'do' should be used. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'needed to' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, it's various time when I forgotten something important

✓ Yes, there have been various times when I have forgotten something important

'Forgotten' is a past participle and needs an auxiliary verb 'have' to form the present perfect tense. Also, 'it's various time' is incorrect; 'there have been various times' is correct.

× Recently I missed my passport appointment that led to loss of 12,000 because it was the face of one meeting at the passport appointment and I scolded by my parents to this thing

✓ Recently I missed my passport appointment which led to a loss of 12,000 because it was the date of an important meeting at the passport office, and I was scolded by my parents for this

The sentence has multiple errors: 'led to loss of 12,000' needs 'a loss of 12,000'; 'face of one meeting' is incorrect, should be 'date of an important meeting'; 'I scolded by my parents' is passive voice and needs 'was' to be correct; 'to this thing' should be 'for this'.

× and now I try to memorize thing quickly

✓ and now I try to memorize things quickly

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to match the context. Also, 'try to memorize' correctly uses the base verb after 'try to'.

× I think the needs I meant to say the daily task of my work, such as the homework from my institution and the responsibility that given my parents and what I do in my life, I think I remember to read in my daily life

✓ I think I mean the daily tasks of my work, such as the homework from my institution and the responsibilities given by my parents, and what I do in my life. I think I remember to read daily

The sentence has quantifier errors: 'the needs' is unclear and unnecessary; 'task' should be plural 'tasks'; 'responsibility that given my parents' should be 'responsibilities given by my parents'. The sentence is also restructured for clarity.

× For that I take help from my mobile phone because there are a lot of applications that available that remind people for important things

✓ For that, I take help from my mobile phone because there are a lot of applications available that remind people of important things

The preposition 'for' after 'remind' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'of'. Also, 'that available' should be 'available' without 'that'.

× I am not a good person at a memory

✓ I am not good at remembering things

The phrase 'person at a memory' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'good at remembering things'. The sentence is rephrased for naturalness and correctness.