Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh dùng các cụm từ không cần thiết và sắp xếp câu hợp lý hơn để câu trả lời ngắn gọn và dễ hiểu.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things because I often forget details after studying for a long time. For example, when I study for many hours, my short-term memory becomes weak.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ lặp lại và tiếng ừ ừ không cần thiết. Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I once forgot the date of an exam, so I didn't prepare for it and ended up failing.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember my bedtime, the subjects I have each day, and the time I need to go to school. Currently, I mainly focus on remembering the deadlines for submitting my homework.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt không rõ ràng. Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc mạch lạc, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và diễn đạt rõ ràng cách bạn ghi nhớ các việc quan trọng.

例: To remember important things, I write them down in the notes app on my iPhone and set alarms every few hours. This way, I make sure I don't forget any important tasks.

× Well I hate to eat this but I have terrible memory I have.

✓ Well I hate to admit this but I have terrible memory.

The phrase 'hate to eat this' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'hate to admit this' when confessing something. Also, 'I have terrible memory I have' is redundant and awkward; it should be 'I have terrible memory.' The verb 'hate' is present tense, but the phrase is about admitting a fact, so 'admit' fits better.

× Short term memory loss from excessive studying is really unhealthy for studying for that long.

✓ Short-term memory loss from excessive studying is really unhealthy when studying for that long.

The sentence is awkwardly structured. 'Unhealthy for studying for that long' is unclear. Changing it to 'unhealthy when studying for that long' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'short term' should be hyphenated as 'short-term' when used as an adjective.

× Just I have, I really had it when I forgot things and the most annoying is when I forgot umm, uh, in an important date.

✓ Yes, I have. I really had it when I forgot things, and the most annoying was when I forgot an important date.

The phrase 'Just I have' is incorrect; 'Yes, I have' is appropriate. 'The most annoying is' should be in past tense 'was' to match the past context. Also, 'in an important date' is incorrect; it should be 'an important date' without 'in'.

× I once forgot my exam date, so I forgot to revise for that exam and I failed.

✓ I once forgot my exam date, so I forgot to revise for that exam and failed.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'I failed' can be shortened to 'failed' for conciseness. No preposition error here, so no correction needed for prepositions.

× Well, before summer holiday I have to remember my bedtime, my subjects of the day and the time that I need to go to school.

✓ Well, before summer holiday I have to remember my bedtime, my subjects of the day, and the time I need to go to school.

The sentence is mostly correct. Adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity. 'The time that I need' can be simplified to 'the time I need' for naturalness.

× But now I only need to know when I have to send in my homework and that's it.

✓ But now I only need to know when I have to send in my homework, and that's it.

Adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow. The tense is correct.

× Well, for important things, I note them down on my notes app on my iPhone and set an alarm for like 3 to 4 hours so that I to remind me of that important notes.

✓ Well, for important things, I note them down in my notes app on my iPhone and set an alarm for like 3 to 4 hours to remind me of those important notes.

The preposition 'on' should be 'in' when referring to an app. 'So that I to remind me' is incorrect; it should be 'to remind me.' Also, 'that important notes' should be 'those important notes' to agree in number and demonstrative pronoun.

× So then I could, you know, lose that important things.

✓ So then I wouldn't lose those important things, you know.

The original sentence is contradictory; setting an alarm is to avoid losing important things. The corrected sentence reflects the intended meaning. Also, 'that important things' is incorrect; it should be 'those important things' for plural.