Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến cho ý tưởng không được truyền đạt một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các cụm từ không phù hợp như "I hate to eat this" và nên tập trung vào việc trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things because I often forget details after studying for a long time. For example, when I study for more than seven hours, my short-term memory seems to get worse, which makes it hard to remember everything.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ lặp lại và tiếng ừ ừ không cần thiết. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề để trả lời, sau đó dùng liên từ để bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, giúp câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. The most frustrating time was when I forgot an important date, such as my exam day. Because of that, I didn't prepare well and ended up failing the exam.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và mở rộng thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên tránh sử dụng các câu quá ngắn và đơn giản để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: In my daily life, I usually need to remember my bedtime, the subjects I have to study, and the time I need to go to school. However, during the summer holiday, I mainly focus on remembering the deadlines for submitting my homework.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "so that I to remind me" và "lose that important things". Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề và các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn, đồng thời cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn ghi nhớ các việc quan trọng.

例: To remember important things, I usually write them down in the notes app on my iPhone. Then, I set alarms every three to four hours to remind me, so I don't forget any important tasks.

× Well I hate to eat this but I have terrible memory I have.

✓ Well I hate to admit this but I have terrible memory.

The phrase 'hate to eat this' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'hate to admit this'. Also, 'I have terrible memory I have' is redundant and awkward; it should be 'I have terrible memory'. The verb 'hate' is present tense and fits the context, but the phrase needs correction for meaning and clarity.

× Short term memory loss from excessive studying is really unhealthy for studying for that long.

✓ Short-term memory loss from excessive studying is really unhealthy when studying for that long.

The sentence is awkwardly structured. 'Unhealthy for studying for that long' is unclear. Changing it to 'unhealthy when studying for that long' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'short term' should be hyphenated as 'short-term' when used as an adjective.

× I studied for like 7 hours a day.

✓ I studied for about 7 hours a day.

The phrase 'like 7 hours' is informal; 'about 7 hours' is more appropriate in formal speech. The past tense 'studied' is correct here.

× Just I have, I really had it when I forgot things and the most annoying is when I forgot umm, uh, in an important date.

✓ Yes, I have. I really had trouble when I forgot things, and the most annoying was when I forgot an important date.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Just I have' is incorrect; 'Yes, I have' is appropriate. 'I really had it' is vague; 'I really had trouble' clarifies the meaning. 'The most annoying is' should be past tense 'was' to match the past context. 'Forgot umm, uh, in an important date' is incorrect; it should be 'forgot an important date'.

× For example, I once forgot my exam date, so I forgot to revise for that exam and I failed.

✓ For example, I once forgot my exam date, so I forgot to revise for the exam and I failed.

The phrase 'that exam' is acceptable but 'the exam' is more natural here. No major grammar error, but slight improvement in article usage.

× Well, before summer holiday I have to remember my bedtime, my subjects of the day and the time that I need to go to school.

✓ Well, before summer holiday I have to remember my bedtime, my subjects for the day, and the time that I need to go to school.

The phrase 'my subjects of the day' is awkward; 'my subjects for the day' is more natural. The present tense 'have to remember' is appropriate here.

× But now I only need to know when I have to send in my homework and that's it.

✓ But now I only need to know when I have to submit my homework, and that's it.

The phrase 'send in my homework' is informal; 'submit my homework' is more appropriate in this context. The present tense is correct.

× Well, for important things, I note them down on my notes app on my iPhone and set an alarm for like 3 to 4 hours so that I to remind me of that important notes.

✓ Well, for important things, I note them down on my notes app on my iPhone and set an alarm for every 3 to 4 hours to remind me of those important notes.

The phrase 'set an alarm for like 3 to 4 hours' is unclear; it should be 'set an alarm for every 3 to 4 hours'. 'So that I to remind me' is incorrect; it should be 'to remind me'. 'That important notes' should be 'those important notes' to agree in number and demonstrative pronoun.

× So then I could, you know, lose that important things.

✓ So then I wouldn't lose those important things.

The original sentence is contradictory; 'lose' is negative, but the context implies the alarm helps prevent losing important things. The corrected sentence uses 'wouldn't lose' to express prevention. Also, 'that important things' is incorrect; it should be 'those important things' to match plural noun.