Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating words. Also, use correct verb tenses and articles. For example, say "Actually, I'm not good at memorizing things. I often forget, so I mark important notes on my phone to remind myself."

例: Actually, I'm not good at memorizing things. I often forget important details, so I usually write reminders on my phone to help me remember.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, "Yes, I have. Last year, I needed to attend an exam, but I forgot about it because I overslept. As a result, I missed half of the exam."

例: Yes, I have. Last year, I needed to attend an exam, but I forgot about it because I overslept. As a result, I missed half of the exam.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Try to give a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repeating phrases. For example, "In my daily life, I need to remember the time I should go to class and keep track of my daily expenses. These are important to manage my schedule and budget."

例: In my daily life, I need to remember the time I should go to class and keep track of my daily expenses. These help me manage my schedule and budget effectively.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using clearer sentence structure and linking words. For example, "I usually write down the tasks I need to do and set alarms to remind myself. This method helps me avoid forgetting important things."

例: I usually write down the tasks I need to do and set alarms to remind myself. This method helps me avoid forgetting important things.

× Actually, I don't.

✓ Actually, I am not.

The sentence 'Actually, I don't.' is incomplete because 'don't' requires an object or verb to complete the meaning. The question asks if the student is good at memorising things, so the correct response is 'Actually, I am not.' to properly negate the ability.

× I often forget things so I chose to mark them in my phone to to remind myself.

✓ I often forget things so I choose to mark them in my phone to remind myself.

The verb 'chose' is past tense, but the context implies a habitual action, so the present tense 'choose' is appropriate. Also, there is a repeated 'to' which should be corrected to a single 'to'.

× Yes I have last year I need to go to a exam but I forget.

✓ Yes, I did. Last year I needed to go to an exam but I forgot.

The sentence mixes present perfect 'I have' with a specific past time 'last year', which is incorrect. The past simple tense 'did' is appropriate. Also, 'need' should be past tense 'needed' and 'forget' should be 'forgot'. The article 'a exam' should be 'an exam'.

× But I forgot and I slept.

✓ But I forgot and I slept.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× Sleep until the exam is half was half.

✓ I slept until the exam was halfway over.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Sleep' should be 'I slept' to indicate past action. 'The exam is half was half' is incorrect; it should be 'the exam was halfway over' to express the intended meaning.

× Umm, for example, what time should I go to class and I need to I need to memorize how much I spend in the day.

✓ Umm, for example, I need to remember what time I should go to class and how much I spend in a day.

The sentence structure is awkward and repetitive. 'I need to I need to memorize' is redundant. Also, 'memorize' is better replaced with 'remember' in this context. The phrase 'how much I spend in the day' is better as 'how much I spend in a day'.

× Last but not least.

✓ Last but not least, I need to remember these things.

The phrase 'Last but not least.' is a fragment and lacks a verb. It should be part of a complete sentence to convey meaning.

× I often choose to write down the things I need to do or set a alarm to remind myself don't forget to do that, it is very important.

✓ I often choose to write down the things I need to do or set an alarm to remind myself not to forget to do them; it is very important.

The article 'a alarm' is incorrect; it should be 'an alarm' because 'alarm' starts with a vowel sound. Also, the phrase 'remind myself don't forget to do that' is ungrammatical; it should be 'remind myself not to forget to do them.' The sentence is long and needs proper punctuation for clarity.