Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition.

例: I'm not very good at memorising things because I tend to forget easily. For instance, today I forgot my handkerchief at the bus stop. Therefore, I usually ask my mother to help me remember important items.

提案: Focus on giving a clear and concise answer. Use past tense correctly and avoid repeating words. Add linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details about the importance of the forgotten item.

例: Yes, I once forgot my handbag at my college farewell party in March. It contained many important personal belongings, which made me feel quite worried afterwards.

提案: Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to list items and be specific about why these things are important. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'identity proves' to 'identity proofs' or 'ID cards'.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember important items such as my ID cards, bag, and books for school or work. These things are essential because I use them every day at college and the office.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to explain your method clearly and check grammar, for example, 'before a day' should be 'the day before'.

例: To remember important things, I make a list the night before going out. For example, I use my mobile and iPad to note down items, which helps me avoid forgetting anything.

× I forget my things very much.

✓ I forget my things a lot.

The phrase 'very much' is not typically used with 'forget' in this context. 'A lot' is a more natural quantifier for frequency or degree in English.

× today I forget my hanky at uh bus stop.

✓ today I forgot my hanky at the bus stop.

The action happened in the past (today but earlier), so the past tense 'forgot' should be used instead of 'forget'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'bus stop' as it is a specific place.

× I always ask my mom to take my things with uh, to take uh, take my things in her consideration.

✓ I always ask my mom to keep my things in mind.

The phrase 'take my things in her consideration' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'keep my things in mind' to indicate remembering or considering something.

× Well, yes, I forget my handbag at my farewell party.

✓ Well, yes, I forgot my handbag at my farewell party.

The event happened in the past, so the past tense 'forgot' should be used instead of 'forget'.

× So I forget my handbag in which I have so much important things on my personal belongings.

✓ So I forgot my handbag in which I had many important personal belongings.

The past tense 'forgot' and 'had' should be used to match the past event. Also, 'many' is the correct quantifier for countable nouns like 'things', and 'important personal belongings' is a clearer phrase.

× everything which I need in at my office or at my college.

✓ everything which I need at my office or at my college.

The preposition 'in at' is incorrect; only 'at' is needed to indicate location.

× Remember my important things.

✓ To remember my important things,

The original sentence is a fragment without a subject or verb. Changing it to 'To remember my important things,' connects it properly to the following sentence.

× So such as I make such as I make a list on my mobile and my iPad, so it is easy for me to remember my things.

✓ So, I make a list on my mobile and my iPad; this way, it is easy for me to remember my things.

The phrase 'such as I make such as I make' is repetitive and incorrect. Using 'So,' and 'this way,' improves clarity and sentence flow.

× Then I cannot face difficulties.

✓ Then I do not face difficulties.

The phrase 'cannot face difficulties' is awkward here. 'Do not face difficulties' is a clearer way to express the intended meaning.