Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct expressions. Instead of saying 'I am good in memorizing things', say 'I am good at memorising things'. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'reminding my thing' and replace them with clearer expressions such as 'remembering things'. Keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I have a strong memory which helps me recall information easily.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and lacks clarity. Try to structure your response clearly by mentioning one specific example. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas logically. Also, check your grammar and word choice, for example, 'directive home' is unclear; perhaps you meant 'relative's home'.

例: Yes, I once forgot my expensive voucher at my relative's home. However, I was relieved when I found it later.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, correct articles and plural forms, for example, 'different types of phone numbers' and 'many people'. Keep your answer concise and focused.

例: I need to remember different types of phone numbers daily because I am an extrovert and meet many people. So, I save their contact numbers to keep in touch later.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Use clear and concise sentences. Instead of repeating 'important information about my thing', say 'important information'. Also, use linking words like 'usually' and 'because' appropriately to make your answer coherent.

例: I usually write down important information on paper because it helps me remember better. I prefer to do this on weekends when I have free time.

× Yes, definitely I am good in memorizing things because I have a high level of IQ which helped me in reminding my thing.

✓ Yes, definitely I am good at memorizing things because I have a high level of IQ which helped me remember my things.

The correct preposition to use with 'good' in this context is 'at' not 'in'. Also, 'helped me in reminding' is incorrect; it should be 'helped me remember'. 'Thing' should be plural 'things' to match the context.

× Yes, I forgot my expensive voucher at my directive home and this watch is very expensive which is gifted by my father on my last birthday, but at last I find my watch.

✓ Yes, I forgot my expensive voucher at my directive home and this watch is very expensive which was gifted by my father on my last birthday, but at last I found my watch.

The verb 'is gifted' should be in past tense 'was gifted' because the gifting happened in the past. Also, 'find' should be past tense 'found' to maintain tense consistency.

× I like to remember different type of phone number on daily basis because I am a extrovert person and I meet with many person on daily basis.

✓ I like to remember different types of phone numbers on a daily basis because I am an extrovert person and I meet many people on a daily basis.

'Type' should be plural 'types' to match 'different'. 'Phone number' should be plural 'phone numbers'. 'A extrovert' should be 'an extrovert' due to vowel sound. 'Many person' should be 'many people'. 'On daily basis' needs an article 'a' before it.

× Then I take contact number for catch up sometime.

✓ Then I take contact numbers to catch up sometimes.

The phrase 'for catch up' is incorrect; it should be 'to catch up'. 'Sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× Then I like to remind the phone number of my new friends.

✓ Then I like to remember the phone numbers of my new friends.

The verb 'remind' is incorrectly used; it should be 'remember'. Also, 'phone number' should be plural 'phone numbers' to match 'friends'.

× I like to write important information about my things on a paper because it is a very good way to remind our thing.

✓ I like to write important information about my things on paper because it is a very good way to remember things.

'On a paper' should be 'on paper' as 'paper' is uncountable here. 'Remind our thing' is incorrect; it should be 'remember things'. 'Thing' should be plural 'things'.

× Usually, I prefer to like write important information about my thing on every weekend because it is a free day for me and I like to spare my time in writing information about my thing on paper.

✓ Usually, I prefer to write important information about my things every weekend because it is a free day for me and I like to spend my time writing information about my things on paper.

'Prefer to like write' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer to write'. 'My thing' should be plural 'my things'. 'On every weekend' should be 'every weekend'. 'Spare my time in writing' should be 'spend my time writing'.