Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문장이 다소 길고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적인 흐름을 강화하세요. 예를 들어, 'For example' 앞뒤 문장을 명확히 구분하고, 'which' 대신 'that'을 사용하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다.

例: I struggle with memorizing things because I often forget where I put important items like my credit card or phone. To manage this, I make a list and always place my belongings in the same spot. This method helps me remember better.

提案: 답변에 문법적 오류와 불명확한 표현('We're getting it')이 포함되어 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 수정하고, 구체적인 예시를 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한, 'car' 대신 'credit card'를 언급하는 것이 문맥에 맞습니다.

例: Yes, I have forgotten my credit card, which I use for public transportation. It was troublesome because last week I had to walk a long distance since I couldn't use the bus or subway without it.

提案: 답변에 오타('what I what')와 문법 오류('more easier')가 있습니다. 문장을 교정하고, 연결어를 사용하여 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 개선하세요. 또한, 예시 문장을 완성하여 자연스럽게 만드세요.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember to bring items like my credit card, keys, and umbrella. These things make my life easier and more convenient. For example, having an umbrella helps me stay dry when it rains.

提案: 답변에 중복 단어('find find')와 미완성 문장이 있습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 이유와 예시를 명확히 표현하세요. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 다듬어 자연스러운 흐름을 만드세요.

例: I usually use the Memo app on my phone or write notes on paper to remember important things. These methods are useful because they help me organize my thoughts and avoid forgetting tasks. For example, when I have a busy day, I prefer writing a physical list because it is easier to check off items.

× Honestly, I struggle with memorizing things because I tend to forget where important items like my credit card or phone for example, I often lose track on of them which can be quite frustrating.

✓ Honestly, I struggle with memorizing things because I tend to forget where important items like my credit card or phone are. For example, I often lose track of them, which can be quite frustrating.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error and incorrect preposition use. 'Lose track on of them' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'lose track of them'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity. Adding 'are' after 'phone' completes the clause correctly.

× To manage this, I usually make a list or always place my belongings in the same spot which help me remember better.

✓ To manage this, I usually make a list or always place my belongings in the same spot, which helps me remember better.

The relative clause 'which help me remember better' refers to 'spot' (singular), so the verb should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject. Also, a comma before 'which' is needed to separate the clause.

× We're getting it.

✓ It's frustrating.

The phrase 'We're getting it' is unclear and does not fit the context. It seems to be an incomplete or incorrect sentence. Replacing it with 'It's frustrating' clarifies the meaning and fits the context of discussing troubles caused by forgetting the card.

× In my daily life, I need to remember what I what to bring when I go out, such as my credit card, keys and umbrella.

✓ In my daily life, I need to remember what I want to bring when I go out, such as my credit card, keys, and umbrella.

The phrase 'what I what to bring' contains a typo; it should be 'what I want to bring'. Also, a comma is needed after 'keys' in the list for correct punctuation.

× These items are important because they make my life more easier and convenient.

✓ These items are important because they make my life easier and more convenient.

The phrase 'more easier' is incorrect because 'easier' is already a comparative adjective. The correct form is 'easier' alone. 'More' should be used with 'convenient' to form 'more convenient'.

× For example, having an umbrella helps me stay dry, but it rains.

✓ For example, having an umbrella helps me stay dry when it rains.

The original sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'But it rains' is a fragment and does not connect well. Using 'when it rains' creates a proper conditional clause.

× I find find these methods very useful because they help me organize my thoughts and ensure I don't forget anything important.

✓ I find these methods very useful because they help me organize my thoughts and ensure I don't forget anything important.

The word 'find' is repeated twice by mistake. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× For example, when I have a busy day ahead, I prefer writing a physical list because.

✓ For example, when I have a busy day ahead, I prefer writing a physical list because it helps me stay organized.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'because' and lacks a main clause explaining the reason. Adding 'it helps me stay organized' completes the sentence logically.