Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'an yellow fish brain person' nên là 'a yellow fish brain person'). Bạn cũng lặp từ 'and' không cần thiết và câu trả lời hơi dài dòng. Hãy cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tự nhiên và tránh lặp từ.

例: No, I'm not very good at memorising things because I tend to forget things easily, like having a 'yellow fish brain'.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng cấu trúc mâu thuẫn như 'Even though... but'. Câu trả lời khá đầy đủ nhưng có thể ngắn gọn và tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Although I'm not good at memorising, I have never forgotten anything important because I always write notes to remind myself.

提案: Câu trả lời có lỗi về số nhiều/số ít ('the thing' và 'the only things') và hơi lặp từ. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và sử dụng câu có cấu trúc chính xác hơn.

例: In my daily life, I mainly need to remember my study schedule because I plan my study time carefully as a student.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ không cần thiết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và tránh lặp lại ý giống nhau.

例: I usually write notes to remember important things because I don't want to forget them.

× I am an yellow fish brain person and and I will forget things really easily so no.

✓ I am a yellow fish brain person and I will forget things really easily, so no.

The article 'an' is used before words starting with a vowel sound, but 'yellow' starts with a consonant sound, so 'a' should be used instead. Also, the repeated 'and' is redundant and should be removed. Adding a comma before 'so no' improves sentence clarity.

× Even though I am not good at memorizing things, but I have never forgotten something important because if it's important, I will write notes to remind myself of important tasks and I will not forget them.

✓ Even though I am not good at memorizing things, I have never forgotten something important because if it's important, I write notes to remind myself of important tasks and I do not forget them.

Using both 'Even though' and 'but' together is redundant; only one conjunction should be used. Also, to maintain tense consistency, 'will write' and 'will not forget' are changed to present tense 'write' and 'do not forget'.

× In my daily life, the thing, the only things that I need to remember is my study schedule because I make a plan to study and I'm a student, so I just have this thing to remember.

✓ In my daily life, the only thing that I need to remember is my study schedule because I make a plan to study and I'm a student, so I just have this thing to remember.

The phrase 'the thing, the only things' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. It should be either singular 'the only thing' or plural 'the only things' consistently. Here, singular is appropriate.

× As I mentioned before, I will take note or I will take note to remember the important things, because which is which that I didn't allow to forget. I didn't allow myself to forget.

✓ As I mentioned before, I will take notes to remember important things because I don't allow myself to forget.

The phrase 'because which is which that I didn't allow to forget' is unclear and incorrect. It is better to say 'because I don't allow myself to forget.' Also, 'take note' should be plural 'take notes' when referring to making notes in general.