Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I usually forgetting' nên sửa thành 'I usually forget'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I am not very good at memorising things because I often forget small details. This is probably because I have many tasks to handle. For example, I sometimes miss deadlines for minor assignments at work.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'everybody made mistake' nên là 'everyone makes mistakes'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết tốt hơn bằng các liên từ.

例: Yes, I have forgotten something important before. For instance, I once forgot my husband's birthday, which made him very upset. I apologized to him several times and promised myself not to repeat this mistake because it could harm our relationship.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng số nhiều đúng cách ('things' thay vì 'thing') và tránh lặp từ. Câu trả lời cần có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và các chi tiết cụ thể được liên kết mạch lạc hơn.

例: In my daily life, I need to remember many things. For example, I have to complete small tasks at work and prepare materials for the extra English classes I teach to children at home. This includes remembering administrative duties like making photocopies.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'I believe'. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng đa dạng hơn và câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng.

例: For very important things, I usually remember them naturally because they leave a strong impression on my mind. However, for less important tasks, I write them down in my notes or calendar to keep track of them easily.

× I don't consider myself as a person who have very good memory because I usually forgetting things.

✓ I don't consider myself as a person who has a very good memory because I usually forget things.

The subject 'person' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'forgetting' should be 'forget' to match the present simple tense used here.

× I guess that is because I have a lot of thing on my plate.

✓ I guess that is because I have a lot of things on my plate.

The phrase 'a lot of' should be followed by a plural noun 'things' instead of the singular 'thing'.

× Therefore I usually forget about the small details.

✓ Therefore, I usually forget the small details.

The phrase 'forget about' is less common; 'forget' is sufficient. Also, a comma after 'Therefore' improves sentence clarity.

× For example, I usually forget about the deadlines to complete the mini task that I need to do and also like.

✓ For example, I usually forget the deadlines to complete the mini tasks that I need to do and so on.

'Mini task' should be plural 'mini tasks' to match 'deadlines'. 'And also like' is unclear; 'and so on' or 'and similar things' is more appropriate.

× Yes, everybody made mistake and I am not the exception.

✓ Yes, everybody makes mistakes and I am not the exception.

'Everybody' is singular and requires 'makes' (third person singular). Also, 'mistake' should be plural 'mistakes' to indicate general occurrences.

× I did forget about my husband birthday before.

✓ I forgot about my husband's birthday before.

The simple past tense 'forgot' is more natural here than 'did forget'. Also, possessive form 'husband's' is needed.

× He was very upset and I have to apologize him for several times.

✓ He was very upset and I had to apologize to him several times.

The verb tense should be past 'had to'. Also, 'apologize' requires the preposition 'to' before the object pronoun 'him'. 'For several times' should be 'several times'.

× I also have to make myself promise myself I could not never do that again because it would affect our relationship.

✓ I also have to promise myself that I will never do that again because it would affect our relationship.

The phrase 'make myself promise myself' is redundant; 'promise myself' is sufficient. 'Could not never' is a double negative; 'will never' is correct for future intention.

× There are a lot of thing that I need to remember in my daily life.

✓ There are a lot of things that I need to remember in my daily life.

'A lot of' should be followed by a plural noun 'things'.

× I have to remember the mini tasks I need to do at my work and also because I have extra classes at home where I have to teach English for younger children.

✓ I have to remember the mini tasks I need to do at work and also because I have extra classes at home where I teach English to younger children.

'At my work' is better as 'at work'. 'Teach English for' should be 'teach English to'.

× So I have to remember a lot of administration stuff like photocopies and a lot of things.

✓ So I have to remember a lot of administrative stuff like photocopies and many other things.

'Administration stuff' should be 'administrative stuff' (adjective form). 'A lot of things' is vague; 'many other things' is clearer.

× I believe that with something very important, I don't need to make a lot of effort in order to remember because they are already important, so I usually imprint them in my mind.

✓ I believe that with something very important, I don't need to make a lot of effort to remember because it is already important, so I usually imprint it in my mind.

'Make a lot of effort in order to remember' is better as 'make a lot of effort to remember'. 'They' should be 'it' to agree with singular 'something'. 'Them' should be 'it' accordingly.

× But with something less important, I believe that I need to write them down on the note or into my calendar so it will be easier for me to keep track on what I'm trying to do.

✓ But with something less important, I believe that I need to write it down in a note or in my calendar so it will be easier for me to keep track of what I'm trying to do.

'Write down on the note' should be 'write down in a note'. 'Them' should be 'it' for singular 'something'. 'Keep track on' should be 'keep track of'.