Memory— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and a bit lengthy. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words for coherence. Also, use simpler and more natural phrases.

例: Yes, I am good at memorising things because I was trained from childhood to focus on memorization. For example, I can still recall many events from my early years, which shows my strong memory skills.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and is incomplete at the end. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and then provide specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid grammatical errors. Also, be careful with verb tenses and sentence completion.

例: Yes, I have forgotten something important once. For instance, I forgot the password for my IELTS exam scheduled on 14th August 2025, so I had to start the registration process again from the beginning.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more direct and concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I think' multiple times. Provide specific examples to support your points.

例: In daily life, it is important to remember your tasks clearly. Therefore, I set reminders on my mobile phone, which helps me stay organised and complete my chores on time.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and ends with an unclear question. Try to give a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and relevant.

例: I remember important things by relying on my strong memory and by setting daily reminders on my phone. This combination helps me manage my busy schedule effectively.

× Yes, I am very good at memorizing things because I was taught in early childhood that memorization is the best key to remember the things that you can remember it till your end of your life.

✓ Yes, I am very good at memorizing things because I was taught in early childhood that memorization is the best key to remember things that you can remember till the end of your life.

The phrase 'remember the things that you can remember it' is redundant and incorrect. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and causes confusion. Also, 'till your end of your life' is awkward; the correct phrase is 'till the end of your life'. Removing redundancy and correcting the phrase improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I do remember a lot many things from my childhood till now.

✓ I do remember many things from my childhood till now.

The phrase 'a lot many things' is incorrect. 'A lot' and 'many' both quantify plural nouns, but they should not be combined directly. Use either 'a lot of things' or 'many things'. Here, 'many things' is appropriate.

× Yes its a part and parcel of life.

✓ Yes, it's a part and parcel of life.

The contraction 'it's' (it is) requires an apostrophe. Also, a comma after 'Yes' is needed for correct punctuation. This correction improves readability and grammatical accuracy.

× One can easily forget something in his or her life that I do have forgotten some very important thing in my life.

✓ One can easily forget something in his or her life; I have forgotten some very important things in my life.

The sentence is a run-on and confusing. 'That I do have forgotten' is awkward; 'I have forgotten' is correct present perfect tense. Also, 'some very important thing' should be plural 'things' to match context. Separating into two clauses with a semicolon improves clarity.

× That was the password of the IELTS exam that was scheduled to be held on 14th of August 2025.

✓ That was the password for the IELTS exam that was scheduled to be held on the 14th of August 2025.

The correct preposition to use with 'password' is 'for' not 'of'. Also, 'on the 14th of August 2025' requires the definite article 'the' before the date for proper English usage.

× I do have to reach check all the stuff from the starting and re input all the.

✓ I had to check all the stuff from the beginning and re-input everything.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Reach check' is incorrect; it should be 'check'. 'From the starting' should be 'from the beginning'. 'Re input all the' is incomplete; 're-input everything' completes the thought. Also, past tense 'had to' fits the context better.

× I think you need to be clear and crisp in your thoughts that whatever chores you are going to do in your day-to-day life.

✓ I think you need to be clear and concise in your thoughts about whatever chores you are going to do in your day-to-day life.

The adjective 'crisp' is less appropriate here; 'concise' better describes clear and brief thoughts. Also, 'that' should be replaced with 'about' to correctly link the clause.

× I think the best part is to set a reminder on your mobile phone that will keep you updated for all the tasks that you are going to do in your daily routine.

✓ I think the best part is to set a reminder on your mobile phone that will keep you updated about all the tasks that you are going to do in your daily routine.

The correct preposition after 'keep you updated' is 'about', not 'for'. This correction improves the naturalness and correctness of the sentence.

× As I have mentioned earlier that I am good at memorizing things, I remember it from the core of my heart and more importantly, I do keep a set of daily reminders in my mobile phone that keep me updated in my busy schedule.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I am good at memorizing things; I remember them from the core of my heart and, more importantly, I keep a set of daily reminders on my mobile phone that keep me updated in my busy schedule.

The phrase 'As I have mentioned earlier that' is awkward; 'As I mentioned earlier' is better. 'Remember it' should be 'remember them' to refer to 'things' (plural). 'Do keep' is unnecessarily emphatic; 'keep' suffices. 'In my mobile phone' should be 'on my mobile phone'. These changes improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× What things I have to deal with in our daily routine?

✓ What things do I have to deal with in my daily routine?

The original sentence is a question but lacks the auxiliary verb 'do' needed for question formation in present tense. Also, 'our daily routine' is inconsistent with the first person singular 'I'; 'my daily routine' is appropriate.